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"Lithuania Environmental problems" essay - correct my mistakes

jurgita /  
Mar 18, 2009   #1
Environmental problem
I live in Lithuania, Marijampole city. Our environmental problems are not serious as in others countries.
Nevertheless, Lithuania has problems because of the quantity of garbage, car exhaust gas, factories, animals species extinction and the greenhouse effect. In my area most serious environmental problem is trash, air pollutions, climate change, global warming . In the Marijampole city is factory of sugar, which has emitted into the air a lot of harmful substances.

Immediately we want to reduce the problems, therefore we organize cleanliness campaign, and we collect garbage.
Now you must think carefully about the ungreen things, maybe them you can recycle or replace. I think that environmental problems need to be addressed by all the residents and the government.

EF_Sean 6 / 3,491  
Mar 18, 2009   #2
Pick a thesis statement, a clear, specific statement of what you want to argue. Do you want to argue that Lithuania has fewer problems than other countries? Or do you want to focus more on the severity of the problems it does have? Maybe you could pick a single problem, and research it in detail? At the moment, the essay jumps about from idea to idea without much to connect them.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Mar 19, 2009   #3
Nevertheless, Lithuania has problems involving the quantity of garbage, car ...
Yeah... you need to be more specific. What is a unique concern for Lithuania? Do a little Googling around, you can do it! :) Internet research is fun. Check out this one I found for you:

nationsencyclopedia.com/Europe/Lithuania-ENVIRONM ENT.html

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