please give me some advice for my toefl essay.
Live performance of television broadcast, which is more enjoyable
As entertainment becoming a necessary part of daily life an accumulating number of people contribute a large amount of money to short-time relaxing , such as live performance. Yet some people prefer television broadcast with low cast. As far as I am concerned, the former choice seem to fit my condition. Not only does the valuable chance to see my idol attract me but also the passion in the live show drives me make up my mind. And the live performance totally gets me out from the obstruction of TV advertisements.
There is no argument that it is unbelievably exciting to face your idol . For example, I will catch it at any account if the opportunity to see my idol-Sarah Conner is available. Because it is totally different from hearing her voice on TV. And how many times could I have to be so privileged in my lifetime. Maybe the ticket price is as amazing as the concert .But it is completely worthy.
Besides that the passion in the live show is a crucial reason that I can not give up it. Just image a picture :Thousands of people who have the same emotion with me wave our hands and sing our favorite song together. It is impossible to feel the shocking in any other place. Maybe somebody hold the idea that it is unnecessary to cheer up in the live show and it is same to enjoy music at home. Nevertheless I have to say we are not only audiences in the live show but also the participators who are creating sensation.
Last but not the least, the TV advertisements really annoy me. Because they often ruin my dream that obtaining the complete relaxing in the program. Who needs a break at the climax of the show.
While in the live show I could get rid of the shadow of being disturbed.
In a word, a live performance for me is a so extraordinary experience that I vote to it unconditionally .Other people at the opposite side may have a good life without it. But they do miss something.