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'lived with my parents' - my IELTS Inviting letter practice.



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Jun 20, 2012   #1
Hello, I am practicing writing, any comment to my essay will be appreciated.

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You have recently moved to a different house.Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter
- explain why you have moved
- describe the new house
- invite your friend to come and visit.
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Dear XXX,
Recently, we have moved into our new house, which we bought two years ago. We hope you can pay a visit to our new house when you are available this year. I bet you will like it very much.

As you may know, My wife and I have lived with my parents, our old house get over crowed since the delivery of our new baby, because we hired a maid to look after our baby. So we all agreed to move to the new house. Now our new house is located in Donggang Central Business District. It has four bedrooms and two living rooms, roughly twice the size of the old one, now we don't need to share rooms anymore, everyone has his/her own room. It might be an ideal house for you too, since you like shopping so much. There are two big shopping mall just opposite to our house community, you can go there at any time. However, it's a little noisy, which is inevitable for the CBD area. Anyway, We enjoyed the new house very much.

We have not met for a long time, it's last year's spring festival if my memory is correct. You have not seen our baby, don't you? She's really cute!We miss you very much, even the baby. We are all expecting you to our new house and have dinner together.

Yours Sincerely
XXX

EF_Susan - / 2310  
Jun 20, 2012   #2
Recently, we have moved into our new house, which we bought two years ago. Don't leave all that space between the paragraphs.

As you may know, my wife and I have lived with my parents, and our old house got over crowded since the delivery of our new baby, because we hired a maid to look after our baby'her' or 'him'.

NowOur new house is located in Donggang Central Business District.

There are two big shopping malls just across from our house community, so you can go there at any time.

Anyway, we enjoyed the new house very much.

We have not seen each other in a long time, it was at last year's spring festival if my memory is correct.

You have not seen our baby, have you?

We are all expecting you to our new house to have dinner together.

:)


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