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Writing IELTS Task 1 - Living alone in England - Mixed Charts (Bar Chart & Pie Chart)


yenlllle 1 / 1  
Jul 4, 2023   #1

Living alone in England by age and gender, 2011



While bar chart indicates how Britain males and females in multiple ages lived independently in 2011, the pie chart compares the figure for bedrooms designed in one-person accommodation. Overall, the male youngsters prefer live solitarily, whereas this lifestyle is prioritized by the older female. Additionally, one-person households mainly own two bedrooms.

With regard to the bar chart, while the majority of men aged 35-49 live by themselves, at 65%, the highest percentage in women is the age group 85+, at 75%. Besides, a similar pattern between men and women was witnessed at the age of 50-64 and 16-24, with around 50% of individuals choosing alone lives. The male aged over 85 living on their own witnessed the lowest with 25%, however, the lowest proportion in female is surveyed by the 25-34, with roughly 40%.

Regarding the pie chart, the household with one bedroom accounts for the highest with 35%, followed by the two-bedroom and three-bedroom residences with 28%, 29.8% respectively. On the contrary, just 5.3% of one-person accommodation owns one bedroom, and there is a very small figure for the household possessing over 5 bedrooms, which is 1.4%.


  • Bar chart and Pie chart
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 14,797 4780  
Jul 8, 2023   #2
The given analysis feels too rushed. You are trying to accomplish information delivery in a single sentence, when that should not be the case. You are allowed 3-5 sentences per paragraph to help you achieve a clear and concise information delivery system. Why are you not utilizing that format for your paragraphs? It would benefit your overall score to take your time to spread out the information in a manner that shows a better analysis and reporting method. You should try to focus on your sentence development in relation to my previous statement. If you properly structure your sentences, if you focus more on information clarity, you should not have a problem boosting your score to a more passable one.
dangngoctung4 4 / 7 1  
Jul 8, 2023   #3
Avoid trying to cover the analysis in 1 or 2 sentences, this may cause you not to meet the word count (150 words) and lack of grammar and lexical structure. It is better to report within 2 or 3 sentences, as the range allows you to use more grammar and lexical structure.
OP yenlllle 1 / 1  
Jul 13, 2023   #4
@Holt
Thank you so much! Can you estimate the score for this article please?

@dangngoctung4
Thanks a lot! But in case I don't have enough time, instead using 3-5 simple sentences, can I write 2-3 complex sentences like above?


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