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Logging can damage the environmental life in forests - it brings deforestation



Lalu Aulia Sastr 2 / 1  
Sep 13, 2016   #1
IELTS Writing Task 1 : Summary of Environmental Impacts of Logging

Now days, logging is the new world's half-truth has two-side are major part of industry era and one of the most contributor of the global warming. Logging can damage the environmental life in forest as deforestation. Forest is home of part of ecosystem namely animals, plants, amphibians, small mammals, insects, and worms, which all of them create stability in eco.

Accordingly, the vanishing of the forest, destroy the ecosystem and imply to increase the global warming. The forest does not able to defense erosion, increasing of carbon dioxide in atmosphere, water and air pollution during to massive logging. Not only deforestation but also road building and burn large forest area are logging companies do for create access to one area, with the result that forest loss contributes to protect this world from the global warming. Ultimately, forest would not help to protect us and sustainable for future generations.

mem77 62 / 93  
Sep 13, 2016   #2
hello lalu, it is nice to see your essay and also i am totally appreciate with your effort to do this essay. but, i have some notice for you to make your essay more good.

on the first sentence, i think "Now days ,......" should be replace with "These day/Nowadays,......" to make your essay more colorful. and your grammar on the second sentence are wrong. "has two-side are major part......" should be replace with "has two-side are majoring part......."

i think that's enough from me, and keep practice sist!


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