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Would I rather be loved for the imperfect person that I am, or for amazing qualities I don't have?



sunny17 2 / 3  
Nov 11, 2014   #1
"It is better to be underrated by people than to be overrated by them."

What are your thoughts on the above statement?


Overrated things are misleading and particularly annoying for people who are not impressed by the superficial things in life. While people may fall for the golden exterior we build around things, nobody really sticks around once they find the bottle half empty.

Nothing is worse than standing in line for the opening of a grand restaurant that has been shamelessly advertising on every television channel, only to walk out with pasta that tastes like plastic. Perhaps if you had gone to the shabby little café down on main street that apparently made really good pizza, you may have ended up with a happier stomach.

However, we cannot blame our attraction to glorified materials. It is human nature for us to be left awe-struck after walking past a limo parked in front of a fancy hotel. And it is not our fault when we peek inside, hoping that a famous stranger, we know nothing about, is staring straight back at us. It is our nature to be fooled by such superficial things and even though it may sound like humanity's tragic tale, we all know it is true.

When things are underrated, we allow room for improvement. We allow ourselves to make the journey to greatness and achieve all that we desire to achieve. But when we glorify things that need not be glorified, we envelop them in a falsehood, shielding their true nature from the world.

The question, alas, we must ask ourselves is, would I rather be loved for the imperfect person that I am, or for the amazing qualities I don't have? And when we build relationships around falsehoods like that, how long do these bonds between us last?

vangiespen - / 4077  
Nov 11, 2014   #2
You were being asked to respond by giving your thoughts pertaining to the statement about

"It is better to be underrated by people than to be overrated by them."

Instead of presenting various examples that just beat around the bush but does not really answer the prompt, you should have opened your statement with a direct agreement or disagreement with the statement. Why should you have done that? The essay prompt is clear, you were to give your opinion regarding the statement. Therefore, the essay should be an argumentative essay that takes a particular side on the matter. After presenting your side, you can then discuss your thoughts on the matter using one or two concrete examples that tie in directly with the essay prompt. Doing so will ensure that the essay prompt is properly responded to and offers further insight into your opinion on the matter. Right now, the essay works in a very flimsy way. It does not really stand up as solid when analyzed with regard to its content and your thoughts on the matter.
OP sunny17 2 / 3  
Nov 11, 2014   #3
thank you for the clarification, I'll try to be on point from now on


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