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Low salary and more vacation time or high salary and less vacation - TEOFL



MissS1987 3 / 8  
Aug 13, 2010   #1
TOPIC: A job with more vacation time but a low salary is better than a job with a high salary but less vacation time.

Many people prefer a job with a high salary but less vacation time, since with plenty of money, a lot of dreams on material leve will be fullfilled. But for me, a job with more vacation time but a low salary is much more attractive.

A job with more vacation time bring us more time to spend with our family and friends. With the pressure of the society, we all need the time to relax ourselves. More vacation time undoubtly offer us more freedom to spend with our family and friends. This is almost the best way for us to relax. Furthermore, this brings us more chances to make better communication with our family members and friends. On one hand, bridge the generation gap between parents and children, on the other hand enhance the frienship more firm.

In addition, a job with more vacation time give us more chances to take time to travel, to make advanture, to find ourselves. Staying at one place for a long period of time will get people bored. At this time, a chance to take a travel to some other places will make people feel fresh again. Especially when people take time to travel to some other countries, the overseas culture and life style will both wide people's horizon as well as give people more ideas about life and work.

Besides that, people can also study more to refine themselves by taking the vacation time to learn something. No matter learning a new kind of skill or new kind of language, this will make our brain much more smart. And this may also benifit us in our work field, accelareting the process to get promoted.

Admittedly, it is hard to deny that money plays a very important role in our life. Without money, it is difficult to make a lot of dreams to come true. But more vacation time do bring us more happiness and more chances for us to find ourselves. Since life is short, it will be very wise to take a job with more vacation time.

vaishali1980 26 / 76  
Aug 13, 2010   #2
I found some mistake

a lot of dreams on material leve leave will be fullfilled fulfilled

it is difficult to make a lot of dreams to a come true
EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Aug 15, 2010   #3
Add one more sentence to that first paragraph. Make it a sentence that tells the main idea about why you choose low pay + vacation. This will be your thesis sentence.

A job with more vacation time brings us more time to spend with our family and friends. With the pressure of the society, we all need the time to relax ourselves. More vacation time undoubtly offers us more freedom to spend time with our family and friends. This is almost

And this may also benefit us in our work field, accelerating the process to get promoted.

ALSO, IF YOU TAKE the low paying job with more vacation time, you can use the vacation time to work on your own lucrative part time business or to apply for jobs that offer BOTH high pay and vacation.

:-)


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