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The majority of visitors who come to New Zealand are come from Australia.



andika08 81 / 73  
Sep 13, 2016   #1
International Visitors to New Zealand: Country of Origin

The pie chart shows the precentage about visitor from other country to New Zealand. The majority of visitors who come to New Zealand are come from Australia. But there are others country that visit New Zealand.The largest visitors to New Zealand 40% come from Australia. Make that precentage become the first. There are others Nationality visitors to visit New Zealand come from United Kingdom 12%. It become thats Nationality to be second from that information. After that there are also United States 9% and there is get ranks third. Some information show that there are others Nationality who visit New Zealand. Furthermore, visitors comes from three countries in East Asia such as the order China 5% which the most in East Asia, different from Nationality Japan 4% and South Korea 3% behind two Nationality before. Three Nationality from East Asia become the last three Nationality that visit New Zealand. For the last there are other Nationality based on the information 27%.


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rian31 14 / 17  
Sep 13, 2016   #2
hai classmate
I have some suggestions for you
I hope it works

The pie chart shows the precentagepercentage about visitor from other countries to New Zealand.
But there are others country that visit New Zealand
Make that precentagepercentage become the first.
... come from United Kingdom at 12%. It become that is Nationality to be second ...
After that, there are also United States at 9% and there ...
Some information show I think you can use according the data,that there are others Nationality ...
... different from Nationality Japan 4% (...) behind two Nationality before. Three Nationality from East ... For the last there are other Nationality ...
too many words Nationality , you must use arrange of vocabulary for to be high score.

break a leg bro
still writing


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