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The map illustrates 2 possible spots for building a new school. IELTs task 1


Vns9x 102 / 236 16  
Feb 1, 2015   #1
The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map illustrates 2 possible spots for building a new school. Overall, the S2 will benefit those who dwell in the town center, in sharp contrast to this, S1 is the ideal spot for rural population.

The first site situates on the north-east countryside which means far away from the hometown center. It is quite close to the main road that goes to Sturry. As a result, people live somewhere around Sturry should be benefited if the school decided to build a school at that spot. Aside from that benefit, S1 is much closer to the university than S2 do, and thus this can espouse you to keep in touch with your sibling as you guys grow up.

The second site is definitely made for urban people since it locates in the hometown center. It is more than seven kilometers from Chartman, while this value is approximately two kilometers shorter than its partner Sturry. The spot can be lucrative for any people since it exists almost in the middle of two roads but due to no traffic zone it would be arduous for many people to bring their kids to that spot, especially by their private vehicles. Its distance to the university is quite substantial, so the likelihood of you encountering your acquaintances will be quite low.

I am a novice when it comes to this type of writing, and thus any advice would be appreciated!




Linhpt 2 / 3 2  
Feb 1, 2015   #2
I think it is good, most main relevant features are compared. However, the towns' population is not mentioned yet.
motoja 3 / 7 2  
Feb 1, 2015   #3
For this part, I don't think you should put too much of your own opinion such as this: Aside from that benefit, S1 is much closer to the university than S2 do, and thus this can espouse you to keep in touch with your sibling as you guys grow up.

To fulfill the 150 words requirement, what you can do is describing the information in more detail. For example, this is a map, so you should describe the direction of things related to each other. Example: The town of Canterbury is located 7 km east of Chartham and 5 km west of Sturry, S2 is at the southern edge of the town center, etc.
ruwchii 6 / 18 3  
Feb 2, 2015   #4
Let me try to rewrite this sentence.

Overall, the S2 will benefit those who dwell in the town center, in sharp contrast to this, S1 is the ideal spot for rural population.

Overall, while S2 is a perfect spot for citizens of town center, S1 is highly likely for the citizen in rural area.


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