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IELTS Task 1: The maps below show a coal mine and its redevelopment into a visitor attraction site.


HelenN 5 / 10 3  
Jun 21, 2021   #1
Topic:
The maps below show a coal mine and its redevelopment into a visitor attraction site.

Summarise, report main features and make comparisons where relevant.



My Writing:

The maps illustrate a development plan of a visitor attraction landmark on an existing site that was previously utilized as a coal mine.

According to the illustration, the original coal mine included various sites. To the north was the coal mine entrance; staff dressing rooms and lunch room situated on its left. In the opposite direction, there were two waste sites located on the east side of the mine.

There are some significant changes to the site that intended to augment its walkability and entertainment. First, some of the buildings were renovated and converted to serve different purposes. The entrance was transformed into a tourist entrance while the medical center on the west became a coffee shop. Similarly, the partial wall between the staff change rooms and lunch room was torn down to function as a public museum for visitors.

Second, some sites underwent mass demolition. More specially, both waste sites on the east and northeast were overhauled and displaced by a driving circuit and a pond.

Lastly, it is clearly seen that some new features were added to the new-developed visitor attraction site. The walking track was constructed, enhanced the circulation in the site by creating a pathway from the north of the driving circuit to the center of the park. Furthermore, the site also considered having children playgrounds on the southeast of the park.


  • The maps below show a coal mine and its redevelopment into a visitor attraction site.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 12,263 3976  
Jun 22, 2021   #2
The essay is over-written at 226 words. It cannot be completed properly within 20 minutes. The writer will cut into the Task 2 writing time if the proper proofreading, editing, and finalization process will be applied to an essay of this length. 150-200 words would be more than sufficient for their task. 175 words is the most appropriate word count. Not too long, not too short. sufficient enough for the remaining editing time.

The number of images must be identified and tagged in the summary. The tag will help keep the reader on track when the image content is discussed in the paragraphs. The first is identified as a coal mine. How should the new site be tagged based on its entertainment purpose? It was called a Visitor Attraction Site in the image. This reference can be used once at the start then varied throughout the presentation.

A 2 image comparison is done over 4 paragraphs. The 5 paragraph presentation is used only when required in the Task 2 presentation. Do not mix-up the paragraph formats due to writing time constraints. Task 1 essays are always brief in presentation style.
OP HelenN 5 / 10 3  
Jun 22, 2021   #3
@HelenN
The maps illustrate a development plan of a visitor attraction landmark on an existing site previously utilized as a coal mine.

As illustrated, the original coal mine included various sites. To the north was the coal mine entrance; staff dressing rooms and lunch room situated on its left. There were two waste sites located on the east side of the mine on the east.

There are some significant changes to the site. First, some of the buildings were renovated and converted to serve different purposes. The entrance was transformed into a tourist entrance, while the medical center on the west became a coffee shop. Similarly, the partial wall between the staff change rooms and lunch room was torn down to function as a public museum for visitors. Second, some sites underwent mass demolition. The former waste sites were replaced by a driving circuit and pond. Lastly, some new amenities were added to the new-developed visitor attraction site, such as the walking track and the children's playgrounds.


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