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What does it mean to be an "Aussie?"



Bobovikisan 3 / 4  
Nov 1, 2017   #1
This is just casual 5 minute writing practise! Structure isn't much of big deal because I'm just writing to improve my language techniques! Today's topic for me is:

What does it mean to be my nationality?



Australians are stereotyped as those hooligans in the outback. Us, Australians are much more than you think. Being an Aussie is to be unique, it is a part of my identity. I might not ride a kangaroo to school, but the flora and fauna here are so unique. There's the Tasmanian Devil, Wombat, Kangaroo, Platypus, Koala, there are so many I could ramble on for days. Our languages are so unique we casually throw around the phrase "Dead Horse" (ketchup) on a picnic. We also shortened the British "Good day to you, madam!" to "G'day mate! Let's put a shrimp on the barbie." Australia is also a very multicultural place. around 28.2% of Australia's population were born overseas, according Australian Bureau Of Statistics. Imagine all these people of different ethnicities! I might not be a a typical Aussie Bogan, but mate, Australia is my home. From the animals to the language to the way multicultralism has bought us together. Being Australian to me means that I am unique.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15388  
Nov 1, 2017   #2
Yet again a highly entertaining piece of writing from you. This is fun to read and it does take the reader on the journey of what it means to be an Aussie. However, I find that there are some points in the presentation where additional information is required before the information that you present. For example, when you said that most of the Aussies are mostly born overseas, then you say that you are not a typical Aussie, I take that to mean that you were not born in Australia. So why not identify where you came from so that when you say you may not be a typical Aussie Bogan, the reader knows what you are talking about. That's the only part that I actually find a bit hard to understand in your writing due to what I feel, is a missing reference to connect the two statements.
tenkei 4 / 8  
Nov 1, 2017   #3
I enjoyed reading your writing. Living a country which has less diversity, I am interested in what makes Australians feel a sense of belonging. I sensed your love toward your nationality through your writing!


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