IELTS. Can men and women perform the same jobs?

Nowadays, men and women successfully cooperate in developing their society. In fact, the mosern society has surpassed the myth that each gender can be influntial only in certain tasks. Howevere, dispite the fact that the world has witnessed a number of successful men and women in almost every field, some still believe that there are specific jobs for each gender. Wether this is true or false is a matter of controversy. Therefore, this essay will examine different views relating to the topic.

Many people think that gender differences are very important in the field. They believe that the physical nature of women enables them to work in specific jobs where on physical pwoer is required such as nursing, teaching, or working in maintaining social relations in organizations. This can be supported by some researches that found that women can be better than men in communication and using the language. On the other hand, it is unlikely to find women working on operating heavy machines, building houses or farming. In addition, in some third world countries, people may not accept the fact that famels are able to perform males' jobs and vise versa. For instance, men , working as nurses , may expose to inappropriate comments.

On the other hand, others argue that both male and female can perform well in any job. With the new advanced technology, work has become much easier; hence women are not restricter by the the idea that they are weak and not as qualified as men. Similarily, men also prove to be successful in what was believed to be famales' jobs as desining or cooking , chief Ramsy is a great example of that.

In conclusion, from my perspective, women and men are equal and capable of specializing in any field depending on their own interest.

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sorry for the spelling mistakes . I was in hurry

This is a well written essay with good structure.
In my opinion rather than explaining one point you could have included more points, other than that it's a good one.

... hey... too many spelling mistakes... be careful with this tendency because that would affect your score. You can write well and try to take advantage of it :)


... this is about jobs and therefore you've got to be specific about it;
Many people think that gender difference plays an important role in certain professions.


.... well, it is not about the physical strength. In fact men are stronger than women physically. But it is the nature of women. Women have less ego, better at communicating, understands others' feelings better. Men on the other hand are stronger in physical strength, more task oriented, less talkative etc.

Thanks Ahmad and dumi

I really appreciate your help :)

nada
what i have to say is in IELTS as I am also preparing for it, you have to put atleast three points favoring to your opinion, it should be explained in different paragraph. If you visit my thread you come to know what i mean, I am not saying that my essays are good, but the structure of the essay.

And for every IELTS essays there are mostly two sets of question. which both are important to answer.

This below piece of information i got from a site.
Body Paragraphs:-
For an IELTS essay, you should have 2 or 3 body paragraphs - no more, and no less.
For your body paragraph, each paragraph should contain one controlling idea, followed by supporting sentences.

Hope this will help you.
All the best.