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Over 200 million people are suffering from Malaria, the disease caused by mosquitos; TED summary



nda18 46 / 60  
Oct 31, 2016   #1
Over the past century, the average of lifespan has more than doubled. In contrast, another statistic shows the comparison of the childhood death rate in 1960 and 2004. In 1960, 110 million children were born and 20 million of those died before the age five. Meanwhile in 2004, 135 million children were born and less than 10 million of them also died before they reach 5 year old. The causes of these death, mostly, are Diarrhoea, Pneumonia and Malaria.

Over 200 million people are suffering from Malaria, the disease caused by mosquitos, at any one time. To get rid of this disease involves many things. It involves communicators, social scientists, drug companies and rich-world governments so that we will be able to eradicate malaria. Having those elements is hard, there are another way to eradicate the diseases. Educating teacher with a good education and improve teacher some skills and these two things can make differences for millions of lives, if people get it right.

In brief, taking brilliant people to study these things and getting other people involved, the solutions will come up.

debby17 8 / 19  
Oct 31, 2016   #2
Hi there...

Your writing is good but I have some correction to make it better..

lifespan has more than doubled

the age {of } five

mostly, are{were} Diarrhoe

this disease involves many things. It involves {such as } communicators


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