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TASK 2 More people suffering health problems are caused by a fast food consumption

ilankelo21 36 / 41 22  
Feb 7, 2016   #1
In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

It is believed that consuming too much fast food will result in high rate of disease suffered by inhabitants. While others believed this notion, I would argue less exercise is another factor needed to take into account. To cope with this a pressing issue, not only a higher tax should be implemented, but also guiding promoted by government on society to have a regular exercise is highly acceptable.

It cannot be denied that eating more fast food will lead to many serious sickness faced by inhabitants as this food contains more chemical ingredients which is not good for health. A current study conducted by WHO showed that many citizens suffering many health problems these days are mainly caused by unhealthy food they consume in their daily lives.This outcome of this study indicates that a great health problems suffered by city-settlers is highly connected with much fast food humans consume.

Aside from previous discussion, I am more likely to reckon that a lack of exercise held by inhabitants is another detrimental factor influencing this trend. A new finding conducted by British health government informed that many British-settlers have a less time to do regular sport. This phenomenon creates high obesity rate which highly results in some serious diseases. It is thus lack of exercise is another factor influencing human health problem.

In order to tackle this problem, besides a high fast-food tax whose aim to decrease the number of people consuming unhealthy meal, a regular exercise should be promoted by government as well, so that the awareness of inhabitants to do more exercise becomes greater which finally contribute to decrease a health problem encountered by human beings.

To conclude, it is avoidable that fast food has pivotal role in reducing health quality of people. However, I am more likely to argue that less exercise is another important factor needed to take into consideration. Therefore, both a high tax for fast food and government promotion of regular exercise on inhabitants should be applied to cope with this problem.
vangiespen - / 4,137 1449  
Feb 7, 2016   #2
Muhammad, you need not have presented a discussion about exercise being necessary in the discussion. It is not being required by the prompt. As you know, you are only supposed to follow the prompt instructions in the essay discussion that you are given. The essay only asked for your agreement or disagreement of the opinion that government should impose higher tax on fast food because it poses a health hazard to the citizens. There was nothing in the discussion asking you to provide an alternate opinion , nor were you being asked for possible solutions to the problem of people eating fast food instead of healthy food.

Since you did not properly develop your essay response, the essay does not qualify as a proper discussion of the topic. Maybe you did not understand the prompt very well, or maybe you forgot to double check the prompt after you completed the essay. One of those two reasons resulted in you submitting the wrong prompt for assessment. I strongly advice that you review the prompt requirements, develop a more prompt adherent opinion, and then present a new essay that better aligns itself with the prompt expectations.

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