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Mistakes make success--GRE Issue



Hellgreeting 2 / 3  
Aug 25, 2009   #1
"Only through mistakes can there be discovery or progress."

German poet Johan Wolfgang Goethe ever said "Man errs so long as he strives". While someone believes that mistakes are the only way to progress and discovery, I don't agree with them. Indeed, by mistakes, we can learn essential experience. However, the claim is kind of absoluteness.

By making mistakes, we could gain useful experiences that how we errs so that try to avoid it next time. When we sweep out the obstacles on the way to success, we are more likely to achieve the goal. For instance, American inventor Thomas Edison finally found the suitable filament for bulbs after nearly 1000 times experiment. Since when he failed this time a kind of metal material was phased out in his list, the more mistakes the closer to the success.

Moreover, making mistakes can be seen as chances to develop our sense of never giving up, thereby making us stronger and unstoppable. Every mistake might stimulate our nerves and lighten the internal ambition of human to overcome it. Swedish physicist Nobel, for instance, did the experiment of making booms for about 400 times. Every time he failed, he became more eager to get success. Successive mistakes contributed to his strong character and finally help him attain achievements.

Someone might argue: now that mistakes can make the progress easier for us, so we should make more mistakes to gain success. However, this view point is unpersuasive. Through learning other's experience could help us to avoid some mistakes and arrive at the top as well. Sir Isaac Newton ever said If I can see a bit longer than others, it is because I stand on the shoulders of giants (and I paraphrase). This sentence means that we could absorb the essence of the prominent ones leading us to the final goal without making unnecessary mistakes.

What' more, sometimes the cost mistakes would be too heavy to accept, so that within long time, we could keep struggling without the light of success. Consider Toshiba, a computer manufacturer of Japan. In 1990s, a great amount of batteries in Toshiba laptop was malfunction ones. Even though Toshiba made its best to refund to the North American costumers, Chinese costumers didn't get the refund. As a result, Toshiba lost its marker share in China and its selling record sharply dropped down. Sometimes, we cannot make mistakes because the outcome might be too heavy for us.

In conclusion, mistakes can help us, and can also be disasters sometimes. The key point is how we face them. When we walk on a smooth road, we should move forward confidently. However, when we meet obstacles, we should never lose ambition, then study it and overcome it. Success is in front of us.

EF_Simone 2 / 1975  
Aug 25, 2009   #2
Your arguments here are coherent and the essay is reasonably well organized, but your grammatical errors are so egregious that they will hurt your score very badly.

A couple of examples:

However, the claim is kind of absoluteness.

This should be, "the claim is phrased too absolutely" or "the absolute nature of the claim is unwarranted."

In 1990s, a great amount of batteries in Toshiba laptop was malfunction ones.

This should read, "In the 1990s, a great number of the batteries in Toshiba laptops were malfunctioning," or, even better, "In the 1990s, many batteries in Toshiba laptops malfunctioned."
EF_Sean 6 / 3460  
Aug 25, 2009   #3
At least try to get basic agreements right.

"Moreover, making mistakes can be seen as a chance to develop our sense of never giving up"

"Successive mistakes contributed to his strong character and finally helped him attain achievements."
yx200986 /  
Aug 26, 2009   #4
Nice essay in the aspect of logic.
yx200986 /  
Sep 4, 2009   #5
Where are you from? I am from China.


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