In this modern society, the more languages you can speak, the more competitive you are

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school.
Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

In modern society, the more languages you can speak, the more competitions you have. Since this phenomenon, it becomes popularly for parents to raise their children' interest toward a foreign language. Even more, some researchers state that it is better to start leaning a new language in the early age. In my opinion, I support this illustration under some conditions, and my statements are following.

Firstly, the biggest concerned about learning another language in early age is the children may not focus on their mother language properly. The primary school seems to be the first place for them to access their own language officially. They are going to learn the grammar, the punctuation and the correct usage of a language. It might be a struggle for them to learn two languages in meanwhile. Secondly, learning a new language may cause extra pressure to the children. In some countries, especially in Asia, parents expect them to be successful in the future. Even the students of primary school have a lot of homework and extra activities. It is cruel to put further burden on them.

However, in my view, I think this is a good chance for young children to access a foreign language. In the first place, because a language is a first step to experience a different culture, in term of thinking, concept and attitude, children can border their horizon by studying a new language. Especially in the early progress, exploring a new culture can accumulate great resources before they grow up. Next, people often regret starting too late to learn a brand new language because of the poor memory. It is obvious that the youth have better memory than the elderly so as to proof that the earlier children leaning a language, the better outcome they could have.

To sum up, learning a foreign language is definite a good thing, but for the very young kids, there are lots pros and cons need to be considered. Under no circumstance should children sacrifice their precious childhood only for meeting the expectation of being a competitive person in the future.

In my opinion , I support this illustration under some conditions, briefly list the main conditions you are talking aboutand my statements are following.

Arlen, what made you think that the discussion being provided by the prompt asked you to consider the age rather than the school grade of the student who is going to learn how to speak a foreign language? Why is your essay concentrated on discussing the proper "age" of the child to learn the language? You make it sound like the language learning is an option for parents outside of the regular schooling of a child. That is not the point of the prompt. The discussion that the prompt wanted you to provide was a discussion as to the pros and cons of having a child learn how to speak a foreign language in either primary or secondary school. Which of the two school levels would have been most beneficial to a student who has to learn a foreign language? It is the level of schooling that should have been discussed in terms of the existing abilities of the student to learn.

It is understood that the child will get additional language training in school, within the aforementioned learning levels. So why are you concentrated on the age of the child instead? All of the discussions that you presented do not take into account the prompt provided information which should have been reflected in your essay. Based upon this serious misunderstanding of the prompt requirements on your part, I regret to say that I do not believe you can score higher than a 2 on task accuracy. Scoring a 2 will mean that the overall components of the scoring criteria will also fail because you did not properly represent the prompt requirements in your discussion.