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Money spent on books - [WRITING TASK 1] LINE GRAPH REPORT



whung17 1 / -  
Feb 14, 2022   #1

write a report for a university lecturer



The amount of money spent on books in books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria over the course of 5 years from 1995 to 2005 is demonstrated in the given line graph.

The 4 countries all had an upward trend. France steadily stayed on top of the chart in the whole period, however the lowest place was consecutively Austria and Italy.

During the first half of the period, the order of the 4 countries' chart was consecutively Germany, France, Italy and Austria and it remained the same in 5 years. Germany, France and Austria rose sustainably by about 10 million each, however Italy fluctuated around 50 to 55 million.

Within the last 5 years of the period, the amount of money spent on books in all 4 countries shifted dramatically. Germany fell to 85 million in 2003 and increased again to the peak of 95 million eventually. On the other hand, Austria soared to over 70 million, surpassed Italy and tied with France.


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Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15384  
Feb 14, 2022   #2
The summary overview and trending statement are too busy. Too much information is being presented in one sentence, creating a jumbled mess of directionless information. The reader expects to read one idea per sentence. Use 3 sentences at a minimum, at all times to explain or represent the every paragraph , regardless of paragraph function . A higher C + C score can be awarded across all paragraphs that way.

The main problem of the writer is not in the way he sees the images. He has a problem in the way he presents the information. He does not try to deliver an impressive analysis beyond a superficial report. Something that can affect the GRA, C+C, and TA final scores in relation to his final overall score. He understood the information, he just did not use the proper format in presenting the analysis. He rushed through the report.
Loren 1 / 2  
Feb 19, 2022   #3
I think the score will be deducted because you used the same words in the provided topic sentence which is " The amount of money spent on books in books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria".
maximo79 2 / 4  
Feb 19, 2022   #4
Here is my introduction:

The line graph illustrates data statistics of book consumption in 5 countries: Germany, France, Italy and Austria from 1995 to 2005.

hope it is useful.


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