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Movies have been popular for sixty years; inexpensive, entertaining and to go out with friend.


rosa paul 1 / 1  
Jun 21, 2011   #1
please i need someone to show me where are my mistakes in this paragraph because i know i have many,
thank you.

The reason of popular movies all over the world

Movies are popular all over the world. The current studies have shown that movies have been popular for sixty years. Movies have many influnced on both young and adult all over the world. The movie production makes billions of dollars each year. there are some of reasons to make movies popular all over the world such as extremelly affordable, touch people's hearts and minds,and go out with friends. This is another reason that makes movies so popular. In particular, I will explain why movies are popular around the world. First, movies are easy to get and they are extremely affordable. If a person wants to watch a movie, then one can just go to the nearest cinema. There are movies theaters in most the big or small city around the world, and the tickets are not very expensive. Moreover, people can watch movies anywhere use cell phone or at home. All they need to do is to go to some local DVD store or purchase them online. Furthermore, people could always watch some TV movies or download them from the Internet. However, some website allowed to downloading movies from their site. Otherwise, you can't download movie without permission. And you can log on with specific movie site to watch these movies for free. Second, movies can be both entertaining and motivating. A person could always have a good time watching movies. At the same time those movies can change their mood by many kinds of ways. They can touch people's sensation. For example a good comedy movie can makes me laugh. A good drama can bring my tears. There are films for every mood a person. Also, movies can motivate people. They can encourage them to be more open-minded or to look at something from a different point of view. Furthermore, they can be educational. A person could always learn something new, interesting or useful from a high-quality action picture. Third, watching movies are a good approach for people to be with their friends. Going to the cinema is an ideal reason to go out together. Also, people could always invite them over for a movie night. Watching movies is a fun thing to do with their friends. When I want to watch a movie with my friends, it is a good experience to us. To conclusion, movies are popular for these reasons inexpensive, entertaining and a perfect reason to go out with friend.

throllen 5 / 13  
Jun 22, 2011   #2
err.. try spacing your paragraph out, I can't read it like this lol
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Jun 23, 2011   #3
Great ideas, Sangeetha!

Rosa, I think your English is looking good. It is important to use paragraphs, though!

In particular, I will explain why movies are popular around the world.

Right after this sentence, start a new paragraph.

Otherwise, you can't download movie without permission. And you can log on with specific movie site to watch these movies for free.

Right after this sentence, start a new paragraph.

Organize the essay into paragraphs so the reader can easily appreciate your ideas.

:-)
OP rosa paul 1 / 1  
Jun 25, 2011   #4
thank you so much i preciate yours advices about my paragraph..

best regared
Rosa


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