yes, the topic suggests so :D
What dumi says is that you should have kept the introduction in more general form as your topic suggests. So, your first sentence should be removed and used as an example if you really intend to have it in the essay. Start with a strong hook that gives a reader a punch ;)Museums provide a unique interactive experience of getting up close to things we usually only see in books, newspapers or on the television.
There are considerable
increases ofincrease in the number of people visiting museums.
There isonly one main reasons of visiting the museums by foreign people
.... one main reason (one makes it singular)