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Does music pay a important role in people's life?



mandyhhhhhhhh 2 / 2  
Nov 3, 2009   #1
Music is one of the essential component in our life. people play different music by the different stituation, different spirit and different culture. Some people even found that they cannot live without music. Indeed, music has its own attraction. For instance, music can provide us with relaxation just like our friends, it can teach us knowledge who resemble our teachers,it also acts as our parents to give us encouragement.

Music gives us entertainment and relaxation when we feel exhausted. The beauiful rhythm of the sofy music not only can relese our pressureh, but also can bring us pleasure. After a day-long-study,I like to take a break to listen to some pop melody by myself. Although some of those popular music are rock-and-roll, but they still can make me feel calm and comfortable. And it also can heal my tireing soul. Except for chatting with my friends, going karaoke with them, going shopping with them, I can find another way o relax myself, that is music.

We can gain different knowledge from the music. Although a piece of music is wery short, but actually it contains many elements. When we listen to the music, we do not just listen to its beautiful rhythm. We can read something in the same time because different music has its different background, different culure and different stories. It is more efficient to get the knowledge from hearing a music.

When we feel depressed, an encouraging song can give us power and encouragement. It can guide us the road while we facing the trouble. The encouraging words of a song just like our parents, it always tells us to be strong and not to give up.I believe anyone could be full of energy when they hear YOU ARE NOT ALONE, BORN TO TRY, REACH and so on.

Although manyof the recent music pieces are not so good as the old ones, but we cannot deny the influence that the music brings to us. It could bring us relaxation, knowledge and encouragement.

O(∩_∩)Othank you!!

rechungp 2 / 5  
Nov 3, 2009   #2
I particularly enjoyed reading this essay because I myself am a musician and understand where you're coming from :)

But maybe for those who don't really find the same joys of music that you do, you could draw up some metaphors that are easier for everyone to empathize with. Perhaps a parallel between music and medicine (seeing as you talked about music having emotionally healing powers)

I think the ideas presented here are good, all you need to do is work on the mechanics (spelling, grammar, sentence structure)


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