pRACTICAL SKILLS versus THEORETICAL KNOWLEDGE
IN TODAY'S JOB MARKET IT IS FAR MORE IMPORTANT TO HAVE PRACTICAL SKILLS THAN THEORETICAL KNOWLEDGE. IN THE FUTURE, JOB APPLICANTS MAY NOT NEED ANY FORMAL QUALIFICATIONS.
TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?
Nowadays, in this high competitive world, people need to prepare the essential skills in order to seize as many opportunities as possible, especially in the working environment. It is suggested that there is no need for personnel to have formal qualifications in the near future because sufficient practical skills may surpass the need for academic knowledge. I must take issue with this point of view as the lack of theoretical background may hinder us from doing our best job.
Firstly, qualifications speak the volume of one's knowledge and ability to work, without them, employees may find it hard to complete the given tasks which reversely has negative influences on their work performance. For example, in order to fix a machine, a mechanic has to know the way it works inside out. Of course not having theoretical knowledge does not necessarily mean that we are limited in the every aspects of the work, but it is better to know the techniques and the reasoning of the whole thing. If we keep doing the job only by mimicking the predecessors or following our experience and the know-how, there will be no evolution or new ideas being made because we do not understand the the function of the system.
Secondly, if qualifications are to be abolished, the intellectual level of people will be degraded as well. No one will be willing to attend or pay for academic classes as the qualifications they receive are no longer useful for their future carrier. Therefore, millions of children might drop out of school despite the fact that educational environment is ideal for them to learn social skills and enlarge their horizons. They will only focus on obtaining experiences for the job they like and this might lead to the increasing amount in child labour which is the last thing that governors want to see in their future generation.
All things considered, the knowledge accumulated through books and teachers plays an important key in our life as we grow up as well as our work performances. Therefore, we should combine the two distinct approaches to learn and work in an appropriate way.You have a tendency to drag your sentences. You can observe this even from the first sentence. You compress too much information into a single stream of thought. This stresses the readers. To avoid this, I suggest segregating your thoughts.
I would, for example, phrase the sentence like this:
Today's competitive world causes people to work on vital skills to enhance their job-seeking opportunities.
Packaging your thoughts this way makes your thoughts clearer and easier to digest. It is straightforward.
I also have a couple of key questions that could guide you in the content of your essay:
1. In line with your first essay, could you say that there are indispensable fields of knowledge that cannot be fully replaced by practical skills?
2. Is the educational system not pursuing enough innovative efforts to potentially move away from the traditional experiences?
3. What particular qualifications do you think are necessary and which are not?
4. Does your argument regarding child labor truly fall through? Most people would mention that the cause of child labor is not the demand for practical skills - rather it is because of poor labor and child protection laws in the country.
These types of questions can be avoided through creating more concrete assessments of your arguments. Ensure that you have data to back your words. Insert examples into your essay to strengthen it.
Lastly, your concluding paragraph also is hanging. You could discuss more why, in reference to your essay, you think the approaches are varied for a reason. Discuss why these two can co-exist. Discuss why they do not invalidate each other, rather why they support each other's purpose in the working environment.
Hi icebear24
I think there is a conflict between these two sentences.
'For example, in order to fix ... Of course not having theoretical knowledge ...'.
The supporting sentence should strongly back the idea that a mechanic has to perfectly understand the machine system in order to fix it.
My rework suggestion: 'Having a complete grasp of every single detail of how the machine functions will allow the mechanic to repair the malfunctioning parts in just one attempt.'
The last sentence of your 1st body seems to be a different idea so put a discourse marker will make it easier to guide readers.
