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New policy of working four days a week. Toefl TPO1: integrated writing



ChloeChen 1 / 1  
Oct 31, 2015   #1
Both of the passage and the speaker mention about the new policy of working four days a week. The passage claims that employers are likely to earn more money by adopting this policy. Also, the article suggest that the enterprises hire more workers so that they can insure the same amount of job being done. On the other hand, the lecturer refutes these points, because the cost of staff training, medical care, more computers and more office space will increase along with the new policy.

Secondly, the passage mentioned working four days a week and hiring more people will make the workers happier and lessen the possibility of overworking and making mistake. However, the speaker said through the thinking of saving money, although a company allows their staffs to work four days a week, doesn't mean that they will hire more people. The company may expect their workers to accomplish their five-day job within just four days. This may still cause mistake making and exhausted workers.

Last, the article and the lecturer both states that to employees, working four days a week does allow them to spend more time on what they want to do, but the lecturer adds that this can put employees in risk of reducing of life qualities. To explain, the employee who demands to work four days a week won't be a preference to companies, and even if they get hired, they might not be chosen to promote.

In sum, the reading and the lecturer hold opposite ideas to working four days a week. The reading shows that it is beneficial to both companies and individuals, while the lecturer tells us that it may end up to have the opposite consequence of the reading's assertion.

OP ChloeChen 1 / 1  
Nov 13, 2015   #2
Hi, klyteshep07
It is useful, thank you. I can't post the reading and the lecture on this forum because of the copyright, but I have asked my teacher if I can send the model practicing exercise(not TPO exercises) to other people. If my teacher agrees , can I send them to you?
Ra_fhli 22 / 17  
Nov 13, 2015   #3
Hi Chloe, I am pleased to know you here. Anyway let me give some additional comment for your writing.

-----may you can give a little "hook" or introductory writing to escort your reader flow into your writing. ----- Both of the passage and the speaker mention about the new policy of working four days a week. The passage claims that employers are likely to earn more money by adopting this policy. Also, the article suggest that the enterprises hire more workers so that they can to insure the same amount of job(Pay attention with the utilizing of the amount of and the number of THE AMOUNT OF for uncountable such as water, information, wage and so on, but The number of is used for Countable like people, and etc. JOB apparently is a countable, so the correct one is The number of being done. On the other hand, the lecturer refutes these points,because the cost of staff training, medical care, more computers and more office space will increase along with the new policy. (There is no VERB) After Because, SV. unless you use Because OF, it could be followed by Noun.

HOPE IT WORKS...^_^


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