I would be grateful if you spare your time to correct and mark my essay
Question: Some people think that newly built houses should follow the style of old houses in local areas. Others think that people should have freedom to buid houses of their own style. Do you agree or disagree with this view?
imitating the local housing trend
Opinions diverge greatly on whether or not newly errected buildings are forced to retain the similar architecture with the previous one. From my perspective, I would contend that house owners should feel free to design their accommodations in their own way.
It is unequal for architects to obey the same style for quarters in a region. Copying merchanically ways of construction might be associated with obstructing their creative ability. This may be explained by the fact that designing a house is still considered as a genre of art which enables builders and designers to show off their asthetic capabilities. This means that each architect has their own method and distictly different criteria in assessing a quarter as being well-appointed. For instant, some tend to take a keen interest in blending between tradditional and modern styles while vintage designed housing becomes more favourable for others.
Another reason for this is that following the same architecture might be attributed to a monotonous and dull picture for the area. In fact, what new accommodation are formulated to look indifferent with the old one disregard the appearance element. The beauty of the way housing being constructed, conversely, becomes one of the appealing part in visitors'eyes when they set their foot to the local area. This is because something outstanding and special seems to leave unforgetable memory.
From all existing justification mentioned above, I am firmly of the opinion that imitating the housing trend might be superficial on account of the architect's creativity hinderance and tediousness in design.
Thu, since this is your first post at this forum, I will not yet score your essay. I will just analyze it for problems and corrections. That way you will know what to improve with your second essay, which I will then score. I am afraid that you will not score very well with this essay if I were to assign a band consideration to it. There is a very strong possibility that this essay will receive a failing score due to its improper / incorrect discussion topic and format. It appears from what you wrote that you changed the discussion instruction for the discussion from:
Do you agree or disagree with this view?
I would contend that house owners should feel free to design their accommodations in their own way.
As you can can see, you are airing a personal opinion without considering the proper discussion response which is supposed to be:
From my personal perspective, I would have to dis/agree with this view.
The main problem though, is that I believe you did not post the correct discussion instruction for this essay. Can you double check to be sure that you followed the correct discussion instruction? Based on the given discussion topic and reasons, it appears that this is a "discuss both points of view and present your own opinion" or "Discuss your opinion" essay. It is not an agree/disagree essay prompt.
If I were to base your score on the assumed prompt, then you did not discuss the essay within expected parameters so you will get a failing score in the TA section and another failing score for the repeated spelling mistakes in the essay. Both of which will combine to make you fail the essay in totality.