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A Next-Generation Digital Book


yurikeyuri 43 / 61 2  
Dec 1, 2016   #1
Push Pop Press Team, Charlie Mecher, and Melcher Media create the first feature-length interactive book, which called "Our Choice" with the author is Al Gore that explains about solve the climate crisis. Many advantages of this electronic book which only touching the screen, like search the location where we are now which called interactive map, open and swipe through the chapters, the pages at the bottom can scrolled, open the page to zoom, lift off and open up have function to open the another page, the opposite that just fold the page is back up and put it back. Moreover, it shows the documentary footage and interactive animation in the page on the book which we can play it while we read a book. also, the video can be pinched and peaked back at the page and the video still playing. The other features illustrate the interactive infographics, like wind, geothermal, solar power potential that only takes the finger, it can be explored and seen state by state. On the other hand, the book can be blown by us and it shows real motion, also these books can run in iPad, iPhone.

Source : TED

Pramudia27 34 / 55 2  
Dec 1, 2016   #2
heloo yuriiii

... book, which are called "Our Choice" with the author isand Al Gore as the author whothat explains about solve ...
maybe you can make it clearer

Many advantages of this electronic book which ...

pay attention about subject verb agreement, and avoid to write too long because it is difficult to be definite.
mardian24 46 / 75  
Dec 1, 2016   #3
Hi let me give you some comments

1. ... electronic book which only touchingtouch the screen ...
after conjunction which you need verb

2. ... to open the another page ...
you can say 'another or the other' to be followed by singular noun

3. the pages at the bottom can scrolledscroll ...
after modal 'can' you have to use infinitife

Thank you
Keep Writing
nurainiyusuf16 47 / 83 6  
Dec 1, 2016   #4
Hello!
Allow me to give you some suggestions.

solve in your sentence should be a noun
with the author is Al Gore that explains about solving the climate crisis.

Many advantages of this electronic

You are able to use "enormous" for replacing "many"

...screen, like search the location where we ...

It is really long sentence seriously, you have to divide it in 2-3 sentences.

To conclude, you have to pay attention to your sentences.
It will be better to take a look about complex sentence and conjunction.

Hope it helps you :)


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