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Non-scientific subject is not important?

Anhy chan 12 / 23 1  
Mar 29, 2017   #1
Some educationalists argue thet non-exam arts-based subjects, such as music, drama, art and craft, should be compulsory in the secondary-school curriculum. They believe that activities such as these can improve overall academic performance.

to what extent do you agree or disagree?

being an expert without learning Non-scientific subjects

Everyone has their own talent, either on art, sport, or the others. That's why many people say that to be an expert one, children should put more attention on practical subject based on their aptitude, because there beliefs that is non-sense to teach children with lack of artistic talent to involve in art classes at school. In my view, I tend to agree with this notion due to several strong reason.

Children will be happier to repeat the subject which they are very likely than the the others. That's why, to make them focus on one skill in particular art, it should be connected with their aptitudes. Moreover, art is emotion which need deeply imagination to create an outstanding compotion. Because of that, to be an art expert, children skill should improve at the begining of their ages. So, they will learn to feel deeply more and more. Additionaly, only person with peacefull condition who has a big possibility to design a luxury product. So, it's clear that developing skill by the aptitudes becoming so essential.

In the other hand, there also artist who have a good painting, but starting to learn art in school without an art aptitude before. This is because they have a big strong-willing to try and try. Unfortunately, there only a small portion of people in the world could be like this.

To sum up, it is true that there is an expert artist today who start painting and drawing without aptitudes. It means that someone's tallent can be improve by the time. But, it will be better for focusing children based on their aptitude to build up a perfect art product due to the fact that they will have a big impression on it.

Mayank7g 9 / 17  
Mar 29, 2017   #2
Hi Chan,

There are lots of grammatical mistakes and proper sentence formation is not there.

In this way, Introduction can be written
Everyone has their own talent, either it's art, sport, or any other field. That's why many people believe that to become an expert in one's field,
tamtamii 9 / 7  
Mar 29, 2017   #3
@Anhy chan

I have read your essay, and I think your essay quite good because I have detection your essay which have some mistakes. You should pay attention with referring.

there beliefs that is non-sense= I think it should be "their beliefs that is non-sense..."
you should pay attention in comparison verb.
Children will be happier to repeat..." = in this sentences, there is no comparison with happier.
Additionaly, only person with peacefull condition who has a big possibility to design a luxury product = in this sentence I confuse to read this, what do you mean peaceful condition? Is it relation with person aptitude? You can explain more detail this sentence.
Holt [Contributor] - / 8,615 2512  
Mar 30, 2017   #4
Sriwidayani, it seems to me that you discussed the wrong prompt requirement in this essay. Were you practicing by answering two different prompt simultaneously? That has happened here before with dire consequences. Such as in this instance. If this were an actual test, you would automatically gain a score of 3 due to the improper topic discussion. The question was whether you agree or disagree that non-exam art based subjects will help a student develop academically so it should be a compulsory class in secondary school. What you discussed instead was whether students should be made to take classes that he may not excel in. Which is a totally different prompt discussion. That is why you failed this practice test. It is clear that you did not understand the prompt instructions nor were you even conscious of what the topic for discussion was.

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