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This is my essay which is wrote in order to develop my writing skill in the TOEFL. Please help me to figure out my grammatical errors and the structure That I used .
Describe a custom from your country that you would like people from other countries to adopt. Explain your choice, using specific reasons and examples
People receive most of the costumes from their ancestor. Some of this costumes have potential to adopt with other nations and countries. My country has a wide range of costumes, which are definitely adoptable with other cultures and beliefs. From my point of view, the best and general custom in our country is named " Norouz".
From five thousand years ago to now, Iranians believe that the spring in every year should be celebrated. This traditional belief named "Norouz" and new year in the Iran has introduced when the spring approaches. As matter of the fact, by approaching the spring, nature become new; plants and flowers grow; trees bloom and so on. Therefore, they thought they should renew their clothes and clean their homes and hold ceremonies as the spring approach. If they have trouble with their kin, they forgive them and kiss each other in the Norouz. They were determined to see their relatives and vice versa. Indeed, spring and New Year was an excuse and it would be seen as a fortune for them for the celebrities. Indeed, what the beautiful costumes Iranians at five thousand years ago they have.
Norouz give the chance to us to develop the social norms which is increasingly has been vanished. In the modern society, people have involved with daily activities and they do not have enough time to see their relatives. It is a good idea to expand this custom to all nations in the world. Therefore, people in all nations celebrate universally and have a chance to visit each other annually. This custom also could be universal, because everyone believes that New Year of the nature is introduced with spring.
Overall, by celebrating this costume universally, people have a chance to visit their families, relatives, friends, etc. In addition, they have an opportunity to clean every mess from their homes and throw out any badness from their hearts. Indeed, Norouz would be a beautiful celebration for all nations in the world.
This is my essay which is wrote in order to develop my writing skill in the TOEFL. Please help me to figure out my grammatical errors and the structure That I used .
Describe a custom from your country that you would like people from other countries to adopt. Explain your choice, using specific reasons and examples
People receive most of the costumes from their ancestor. Some of this costumes have potential to adopt with other nations and countries. My country has a wide range of costumes, which are definitely adoptable with other cultures and beliefs. From my point of view, the best and general custom in our country is named " Norouz".
From five thousand years ago to now, Iranians believe that the spring in every year should be celebrated. This traditional belief named "Norouz" and new year in the Iran has introduced when the spring approaches. As matter of the fact, by approaching the spring, nature become new; plants and flowers grow; trees bloom and so on. Therefore, they thought they should renew their clothes and clean their homes and hold ceremonies as the spring approach. If they have trouble with their kin, they forgive them and kiss each other in the Norouz. They were determined to see their relatives and vice versa. Indeed, spring and New Year was an excuse and it would be seen as a fortune for them for the celebrities. Indeed, what the beautiful costumes Iranians at five thousand years ago they have.
Norouz give the chance to us to develop the social norms which is increasingly has been vanished. In the modern society, people have involved with daily activities and they do not have enough time to see their relatives. It is a good idea to expand this custom to all nations in the world. Therefore, people in all nations celebrate universally and have a chance to visit each other annually. This custom also could be universal, because everyone believes that New Year of the nature is introduced with spring.
Overall, by celebrating this costume universally, people have a chance to visit their families, relatives, friends, etc. In addition, they have an opportunity to clean every mess from their homes and throw out any badness from their hearts. Indeed, Norouz would be a beautiful celebration for all nations in the world.