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IELTS- Task 1.The number of houses sold of UK in 2000



xucoi 14 / 41  
Jun 27, 2013   #1
Hi guys, this is my second report based on statistics after finding how to write these task 1of IELTS. Please give me feedback when you read it. Thanks in advance.

The line graph illustrates the number of houses that were sold in three areas of UK in 2000.

The number of houses sold in three area of UK all was always lower than the cap of the first quarter. A trend, which is the number of houses sold, of the North is associated with the West, whereas that of the East dramatically fluctuates.

In 1st quarter, on average, the number of people who brought houses was 20 in the East following by the West and North with 30 and approximately 50, respectively. In the next 3 months, houses sold in the East gradually increased to about 30. Starting at this value, the highest number of houses sold was dramatically recorded at 90. However, in the end of period, the number of houses sold in the East decreased considerably to the value of 1st quarter.

In contrast, the number of houses sold in the North and the West seems less different than that of the East. The number of house purchasers in the North slightly increased to round 50 and then slowly declined to 45, which lower than that in the first quarter. Similarly, the number of houses sold in the West gradually went up to 40 and after slowly dropped by about the same as the value of the first quarter.


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shinichi75 5 / 13  
Jun 27, 2013   #2
hi,

A trend, which is the number of houses sold, of the North iswas associated with the West, whereas that of the East dramatically fluctuatesfluctuated .

In 1st quarter, on average, the number of people who broughtbought houses was 20

In my opinion you should add a general conclusion to your essay.
OP xucoi 14 / 41  
Jun 29, 2013   #3
In my opinion you should add a general conclusion to your essay

:D. I also want to add, but my essay will be so long and moreover, It's still Ok if you dont have conclusion. :D. Thank you so much for your feedback. I'm also glad when you're VNmese ^^
Fardin 6 / 14  
Jun 29, 2013   #4
hi
it is better to explain more .it seems to be very short specially your first paragraph
shinichi75 5 / 13  
Jun 30, 2013   #5
Hi, xucoi
^^ how can you know that I am Vietnamese???? (:


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