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Number of Japan tourists travelling abroad within 10 years



aayaan 1 / -  
Jan 21, 2013   #1
The bar chart shows the travelling abroad by Japanese in millions between 1985 and 1995 around the world whereas the line graph shows the percentage of Japanese travellers who visited Australia in the same period.

There is an increasing trend of Japanese travellers around the world during a decade. The number of travellers were only around 5 million initially which increased every year and reached to almost 15 million (3 times) in 1995.

The same trend has been observed in the second graph during the 10 years period except two years 1988-89 and 1994-95 where the trend is steep. Before 1985, the percentage of Japanese visited Australia is about to nil and then it increased to 6% in 1995.

In conclusion, both graphs present the rising trend about Japanese who travelled around the world and especially to Australia during a decade. It is not clear the purpose of travelling but probably it would be for leisure as well as for business.

dumi 1 / 6793  
Jan 24, 2013   #2
The bar chart shows the travelling abroad by Japanese in millions between 1985 and 1995 around the world whereas the line graph shows the percentage of Japanese travellers who visited Australia in the same period.

This sentence is too long. Avoid very lengthy sentences because they require your examiner to remember too much details and he wouldn't like it for sure :D... Also "around the world" are not really necessary to reinstate as you already said "travelling abroad"

The bar chart illustrates the statistics of travelling abroad by Japanese between 1985 and 1995. The line graph shows the percentage of Japanese travellers who visited Australia during the same period. These figures are presented in millions.


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