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The number of old people is increasing. What are the advantages and disadvantages?



sweetper 1 / -  
Mar 17, 2025   #1
It is true that nowadays, populations in some regions tend toward demographic shift. And this will affect the world in both positive and negative ways.

It is undeniable that elderly people benefit society. For some jobs requiring highly skillful abilities and intellect, such as doctors, scientists, and researchers, the older the people are, the more experience they gain. However, this is only beneficial if people have enough physical and mental condition to work and support themselves. Additionally, if they are well, they can continue to contribute to their countries. And senior citizens in this regard would serve as a nation's valuable intellectual property. Moreover, in families, older people-grandparents-can help raise children, which relieves the stressful financial burden of care costs for their parents.
Especially, through exposure to their previous generation, children can learn about the traditional values and customs that boost the preservation of traditionalism.

On the other hand, the aging population poses big challenges for the nation's budget and workforce. For countries that are not affluent, the growth of the elderly population will become a financial burden. When people get older and older, this means that more and more money from the national budget is spent on them. At a certain age, people will retire. Countries will need a lot of money to put into pension funds. And this is not easy for poor countries. Besides that, countries with low birth rates will significantly impact the workforce. The issue of people getting older leads to a shortage of entrepreneurial workers because the majority of the workforce will be composed of older people. Most of them will be traditional, set in their ways, and refuse to learn something new. This would be why high-tech devices will not be accepted in old businesses, which decreases the growth of companies in general and worsens the national economy in particular.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15593  
Mar 17, 2025   #2
It is true that

The task 2 essay will never ask you to attest to the validity of a claim being made in the subject prompt. You should never try to prove or disprove the given statement as that is considered a prompt deviation and will lead to an automatic failing score in the TA section because you altered the prompt topic and as a result, failed to properly paraphrase the original presentation.

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You cannot begin a sentence with a conjunction. This will lead to a failing GRA score since it shows that you are not familiar with English sentence structure rules and you do not know how to form simple English sentences properly.

The prompt paraphrase + writer's opinion is too short. You have written a run-on sentence in a paragraph that requires 3-5 sentences to create a proper representation of the original discussion. This aspect of the presentation alone already guarantees that your essay will not receive a passing score.


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