How much the number of older people in Sweden, USA and Japan is growing? Graph.

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

The line graph illustrates the proportion of population for elderly people between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries, including Japan, Sweden, and USA. At first glance, it is evident that Japan is predicted to have the higher population of elderly people in 2040 than other countries. Note, USA has lower population than other two countries in 2040.

To begin with, in 1940, the percentage of population for elderly people in Japan stood at 5 per cent and was flattened out at around 3 per cent over 20 years. In 21th century it increased significantly at 10 per cent, and will be predicted to increase dramatically at 25 per cent and reach a peak at approximately 27 per cent in 2040.

Moving to a more detailed analysis from the line graph reveals that USA and Sweden have similar trends. Both countries stood at less than ten per cent in 1940. During 20th century, the proportion of elderly people in two countries saw at fewer than fifteen per cent, but will be predicted in 2040, both countries increase dramatically at approximately twenty-six per cent and twenty-eight per cent respectively.

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Hi thutye..

Note, USA has lower population than other two countries in 2040.h.(what do you mean about this?)

I'm unsure if you have to mention that the line graph represents those 65 and over. There are a few changes but not too many that could be made.

1st paragraph: I suggest making this change to the last sentence: However, the USA is predicted to have a lower population than the other two countries in 2040.

2nd paragraph: Per cent should be written as percent throughout the essay. I am also going to suggest writing out the numbers. For example, 5 percent should be written as five percent. This will make your analysis more consistent.

Another way to say flattened out is remained stable. However, Japan's number maybe 30 years because it goes past 1980. The next sentence should be written as, "In the 21st century..."

3rd paragraph: You have to put "the" before USA. I would describe what you mean by stood at in this next sentence. You could state that it is the elderly population. Place "the" before 20th century. I would state the two countries are Sweden and Japan so this analysis could be easily understood. I also think this number for Sweden is twenty-five percent. Change this sentence and you will do fine.