An ielts writing task one about why african teenagers using their phones between 2016 to 2019

THE PURPOSES OF mobile phones use in an African country

The researched pie charts depict why teenagers use mobile phones in an African country from 2016 to 2019.
The initial impression from the charts is social networks was the biggest reason why teenagers keep using their phones. Using phone for phone calls was the reasons had a variety of transformation during the give course.

Most teenagers in 2016 to 2019 used their phone for social networks. As we can see in the pie charts, in 2016, this reason accounted for a half of the chart, then it sightly decreased to 48 percent.

In 2018, the researched teenagers using phones for social networks raised to 51 percent and continued to grow to 56 percent in the next 1 year. Besides that, there were also a variety of youngsters who use phones to send email. In the first year of the given period, using phone for sending email occupied with one-forth of the chart and almost did not change next year. But there was a difference that it strongly fell to 20 percent and reminded unchanged in the next year.

In addition, satisfying picture demand was also one of reason why teenagers keep using phones. In 2016, the teenagers using phones for digital cameras accounted for 15 percent and unchanged in 2017. In 2018, it grew to 18 per cent and then sightly increased to 20 percent. The last reasons which have been found among the researched teenagers is using for phone calls. In the first year of the researched course, this reason just occupied with 10 percent and in the next year, it raised to 13 percent. But in the last 2 years of the researched, this reason decreased, 11 percent and 5 percent respectively.

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