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IELTS Writing Task 2: Online and traditional classroom



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Feb 16, 2024   #1
Task: The typical teaching situation of a teacher and students in the class will not exist by the year 2050. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Due to our advancing technological prowess in recent decades, numerous aspects of our lives have become subjects of alterations, of which our traditional education system is no exception, and its retirement is expected by many soon. In my opinion, while this argument is not without grounds, such transitions may be yet to come in such a short span as 2050 for the following reasons.

There exist valid rationales behind the belief in the outdatedness of our current academic landscape. To begin with, the rapid development of many of our technologies has provided a variety of edges over the classic teaching circumstance, the most notable being the surgent of online education with its accessibility and flexibility. Such features equip learners with better control over their progress, from pacing to location, allowing adjustments to cater to their needs. Moreover, a multitude of hurdles and limitations traditional classrooms may face are avoidable for online schooling. To illustrate, teaching activities in prior years had come to a halt because of the effect of the pandemic, for which online classrooms have proven to be a reliable replacement.

Nevertheless, the decline of the typical learning environment is anything but imminent. First and foremost, online education, the premier alternative to conventional schooling, is still riddled with concerns among the public. Online classrooms fail to provide face-to-face engagement between teachers and students, as learners and faculties alike face restrictions in their interactions. This proves to be a major drawback, as pupils cannot get sufficient support and attention to their studies, as well as missing out on developing vital skills such as cooperation and teamwork. Additionally, online education may not be suitable for all subjects, as it requires a certain level of self-discipline and motivation from students to ensure rigorous standards and effectiveness as traditional classrooms.

In conclusion, while online education may have its advantages, the traditional classroom setting remains a crucial and irreplaceable aspect of education.

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Feb 19, 2024   #2
Your prompt restatement is a failing paragraph. The establishing topic sentence does not meet the basic interpretation requirements as you have included information and reasons that are not a part of the original presentation. That alters the direction of the essay discussion in the process. It is this misinterpretation of the original prompt presentation that led you to not properly respond to the proper writer's opinion sentence. Your essay has already failed right off the bat. Your TA score will be scored based on an unrelated discussion and opinion. It may be impossible for you to achieve even a base passing score since the preliminary score is already a failing one. You are not using the proper first person pronouns in the presentation, which makes the discussion come across a a general opinion rather than a personal one. Then, the concluding paragraph is too short. You need at least 40 words in that section to qualify it for scoring consideration. The overall essay is a failing score one.
cardilua 1 / 1  
Feb 20, 2024   #3
In the conclusion you need to summarize the information that you have analyzed and give your personal opinion about that topic not just give your view like that. Moreover, when you give evidence to support an idea, you need to have a deep explanation about that, you need to analyze what it will affect to some part.


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