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In order to solve the problems , people should review the past. 【TOEFL EASSY】



Neil zhang 3 / 7  
Jul 28, 2011   #1
History is a controversial topic in today's society, were it left for me to decide whether people need to review the past to solve the problems of present and the future or not. I will choose the later without any hesitation.

Admittedly, there is an old saying that looking into a brass mirror you may trim your garments. Looking into a single soul, you find out how well you rule. Looking into the histories you foresee the destiny of your nation. To review the past is to read the history. The sayings express the importance of reading history. However histories may have bad influence on us, people will feel confused and will be misled. What's more, with the development of the society, some history events are not suitable for today's life.

People write histories. So it is inevitable that the histories are written from someone's own perspective, which means they probably do not have a clear look at a history event. What's more, It is obvious that 'history is written by the winner', so histories are fundamentally full of propaganda and misconception, in order to please the authority. Sometimes, history from the former dynasty may be tampered by the later regime. As a famous battle in which 3 countries in ancient China an example, historians in different regimes wrote quite distinct descriptions and altitudes to the battle. In other world, we only read a narrow or distorted aspect of a history event, which sometimes exerts bad effect on us.

With the rapid development of the society, some lessons we learn from the history are not advanced enough to suit contemporary situation. Now everyone has the right of education, equality, and freedom. But people did not have these rights, 200 years ago, on which histories base. Moreover, by the elevation of people's increasing recognition and more advanced technique, one could have a better problem solving skill than in the past.

As someone said" history is just like a novel" certainly, when we face problem whenever in the future or at the present, referring to the history is not bad for us to solve the problem, but the best way is to analyze the problem according to our own situation.

sunglyeol 3 / 4  
Jul 29, 2011   #2
I think there are some errors. :-)

History is a controversial topic in today's society, were it left for me to decide whether people need to review the past to solve the problems of the present and the future or not.

Admittedly, there are old sayings; ' looking into a brass mirror you may trim your garments',' Looking into a single soul, you find out how well you rule', 'Looking into the histories, you foresee the destiny of your nation'. To review the past is to read the history.

I hope my feedback helps you
EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Jul 31, 2011   #3
Admittedly, there is an old saying that looking i...---If you way "admittedly," that means you are about to mention a point that contradicts your argument.

Admittedly There is an old saying about perception: "Looking into a brass..."

Use " " marks for the saying.

You English is great!! Very clear...

As someone said, "History is just like a novel." Certainly, when we face problem in the future or at the present, referring to history is useful for us in solving the prob lem, but the best way is to analyze the problem according to our own situation.---Great job!
Xiaowang 5 / 8  
Aug 1, 2011   #4
I have a question here, does anyone know why it is"when we face problem in the futher" instead of "when we face problems in the futhur"
ego 2 / 4  
Aug 1, 2011   #5
dear Zhang Yipeng
your assey is good. it expresses enough about history. but its good to give some examples of persons that could solve their problems very good, but dont know anything about history.


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