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Task 2 IELTS - Some organizations believe that their employees should dress smartly.


irfan727 49 / 68 29  
Sep 27, 2015   #1
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Some organizations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others, value quality of work above appearance.
Discuss both these views and give your opinion.


Appearance is a mirror of someone's personality. Several companies or institutions recommend their workers to wear clothes impressively. Although half of people argue that looking of employees is not important, main point they can show their ability in the work business. I utterly believe that the skills of workers are prominent in the organization, while presentation from staff members are able to support them to gain a successful in their career.

First, getting dressed in the working appearance has not to be luxurious or exaggerate, but it has to be suited with the environment where the employees work. This makes them become convenient and enjoy their job also they have a fashionable style. For example, particularly the employees who face to face with customers or clients like receptionist, customer service or cashier. Certainly they prioritize their appearance in front of their clients. This aim to order to they are able to interlace communication well.

Nevertheless, some member of staff reckon different way which they just think how to goal the target from their organization. This is not wrong, yet it is unsuitable when they work in the tidy circumstance. For instance, a chef who wears untidy uniform, sure some guests will guess that he is going to same matter to his dish. However, this cannot be trusted full that a look in the in work area give an effect directly to his career.

In conclusion, an appearance of the employees is prominent for their job-career while other people state that skills are the most useful to boost the performance.

Rainy_Fon 1 / 1  
Sep 27, 2015   #2
Hi

thank you for editing me.
I have some suggestion for your essay

This makes them become convenient and enjoy their job --> would it be better to --> This (apperance) makes them...

For example, particularly the employees who face to face with customers --> would it be better to --> For example, particularly the employees who have to meet ( In my opinion, I think that "face with" are used in a negative way such as "face with problem"

This aim to order to they are able to interlace communication well. --> I am not quite understand your meaning. Is it mean " The aim of this appearance are... or what? sorry because I was not understand your point so I cannot rewrite them.

he is going to same matter to his dish --> Do you mean " he will come up with the same taste/matter/result/appearance of each dish?

Good luck
Clare 3 / 3  
Sep 28, 2015   #3
looking of employees, I think appearance will be better
main point is they can show their ability in the work business
gain a successfulsuccess
exaggerateexaggerated
but and it has to be suited with the environment where the employees work.
hayaalqasem 9 / 17  
Sep 28, 2015   #4
hi
I would like to rewrite this paragraph
First, getting dressed in the working appearance has not to be luxurious or exaggerate, but it has to be suited with the environment where the employees work. This makes them become convenient and enjoy their job also they have a fashionable style.

First, it is unnecessary to be well-dressed but to wear what suits the environment of work. This makes their jobs enjoyable ,and they become convenient, meanwhile have a fashionable style.

I don't understand this sentence
Certainly they prioritize their appearance in front of their clients. This aim to order to they are able to interlace communication well.
I would like to rewrite This aim to increase their ability in communicating with customers.
Nevertheless, some member of staff reckon different way which they just think how to goal the target from their organization
some members
different ways
In conclusion, an appearance of the employees is prominent for their job-career while other people state that skills are the most useful to boost the performance.

you should express your opinion in conclusion
I would try that
In conclusion, I believe that an appearance is prominent in some jobs, while skills and perfect performance is a crucial factor in the others.
good luck


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