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Pandas Get to Know Their Wild Side - article from National Geographic


azmi23 17 / 28 3  
Aug 10, 2016   #1
Summarize article from nationalgeographic.com/magazine/2016/08/giant-pandas-wild-animals-national-parks/

China is where the popular bears are released the endangered animal to their habitat in August 2016. Giant panda population have declined and labeled endangered since 1990. So, it was a tough decision that China took to set them free into the wild, but it had been unprecedented success. The China still have to make sure this species survival in the conservation nature, are the population safe in the deep forest or just keep after them in the zoo facility.

DNA of pandas brings fact that they were transforming from carnivores to herbivores, but the reason and the exact timing is still unclear. It was called adaptation or animals changing behavior to suit the environment. In pandas, the adaptation happened in their teeth that transformed from canine teeth (identic to carnivores) to flat molar teeth (identic to herbivores) for the modern pandas.

Long time ago, panda used to live in China, Northern Myanmar, and Vietnam. But, researcher have counted there were just 2.500 species left in mountain of China on 1970s and plunged dramatically in 1980s because the lack of bamboo that was naturally die-off.

Davidg021 3 / 4  
Aug 10, 2016   #2
Long time ago, panda used to live in China, Northern Myanmar, and Vietnam.
Many years ago, Pandas used to live in china, Northern Myanmar, and Vietnam.
But during the 1970s, researcher (researchers) have counted (unfortunately found out) there were just 2.500 species left in mountain of China (left in the mountains of China) on 1970s . and (This number) plunged dramatically in (the) 1980s because the lack of bamboo that was naturally die-off. (because of the depletion of bamboo in the surrounding areas.)
ekalamarsyari11 72 / 108 9  
Aug 11, 2016   #3
The China still have to make sure about this species survival in the conservation nature,

... herbivores, but the reason and the exact timing isare still unclear.

It was called an adaptation or animals changing behavior to suit to the environment.

In pandas, the adaptation happened in their teeth that have transformed from canine teeth ...
mahdinurianto25 6 / 12  
Aug 11, 2016   #4
Hello azmi, I am very happy to see the one who has same interest about ielts. I have read your essay, and I like it very much.

-But, researchers have counted there were just ...

I think I can give only this. I hope it can be usefull feedback. Thank you
justivy03 - / 2,367 607  
Aug 11, 2016   #5
Hi Azmi, first of all, WELCOME to the Essay Forum Family, we hope that you find this website to be a useful reference to your writing projects and we can assure you that we will take is one step at a time in order for you to get by and be ready to create one essay after another.

Now, as I go through the essay, what I notice is the fact that the sentences that you have formulated are rather constructed poorly, most of the words are not in the right format or the right tenses, this is not going to justify the ideas that you are trying to extend in this summary essay.

However, I have a few suggestions that will hopefully help you with your revision.

- China is where the popular bears are released the endangered animal
- butand it had been an unprecedented success.
- The China still havehas to make sure
- this species survivalsurvive in the conservation nature,
- however, the question remains, are the population safe in the deep forest or just keep after them in the zoo facility?

There you have it Azmi, I hope the above suggestions for your revision and should; you need further assistance, do let us know and we are here to help. Remember, practice makes perfect!
Permata92 3 / 5  
Aug 11, 2016   #6
Hello azmi...I am very happy to left a comment in your article..

I suggest you that you will better pay attention with the countable and uncountable noun because i saw that several times u take some mistakes in there.

Please left a comment in my article. Thank you 😊
eris28 3 / 4  
Aug 11, 2016   #7
Hi azmi.
What a good topic! It's panda. 😀
Well, i found some mistakes on ur summary, dirrectly on tue first line.
[bears are released] --》 u can write "released" without are.
Well. Thats all for this, u can ask me more directly fir the rest. Lol.

Hasta lavista!
jomul01 14 / 14 1  
Aug 11, 2016   #8
hi Azmi here are several correction that i could give :

China is where the popular bears are released the endangered animal to their habitat in August 2016
were
The China (is) still have to make sure this species survival in the conservation nature, (either) are the population safe in the deep forest or just keep after them in the zoo facility.
hikuma21 2 / 3  
Aug 11, 2016   #9
Hello azmi23,

Giant panda population have(has) declined and labelled endangered since 1990.
The China still have (subject is singular so it must be changed with has) to make sure this species survival in ...


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