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Parental pressure: parents put too much pressure on their children


Winter 6 / 12 4  
Nov 10, 2019   #1

nowadays, parents put too much pressure on their children to succeed.


what is the reason for doing this? is this a negative or positive development?

Parents have undeniably a profound influence on children's development. However, in today's world, they are overwhelmed by parental pressure to become successful. The reasons for this problem are varied and the effects are strong.

To begin with, the parental over-expectation results from parents themselves. Since their desire to have successful children are highly demanding, parents tend to impose rules on the teenagers and expect them to follow these without exception. These authoritarian parents also put enormous pressure on their children to thrive in order to satisfy their demand. Additionally, the cause for parental demand can be attributed to the competition nowadays. As the top position in professions are few, it is substantially intense to compete with others to become leaders. As a result, children are often under parental pressure to have strength to pursue great achievements.

Although the aim for authoritarian parenting is for the sake of children's future, it seems to be counter-effective. Firstly, it can give rise to mental illness such as depression and aggression. Adolescents may rank lower in happiness, social competence and self-esteem when being stressed about parental over-estimation. Moreover, their creativity may be diminished. Because children have little to no involvement in problem-solving challenges, the lack of creativity and problem-solving skills is understandable. More importantly, parents' demand can result in the disobedience and defiance of the teenagers. When the situation is permanent, the relationship may be jeopardized.

In conclusion, forcing adolescents to become successful has numerous drawbacks. Thus, parents should respect children's hobbies to eradicate the problem.
Maria - / 1,098 389  
Nov 13, 2019   #2
@Winter
Hi there! Thanks for being a consistent part of the forum. Hopefully, this feedback will give you insight on how to improve your writing.

Firstly, the first paragraph of your essay is put-together. I commend how you were able to have a concise and straightforward approach to writing, especially because this is a critical aspect to look over when you are writing with ease.

What you can do still to improve your writing would be is to work on your concluding remarks. While you had a solid foundation in your body paragraphs, I heavily suggest working on the concluding remarks because of the lack of substantiation on this part. While it is not necessarily firmly critical that you have an extended conclusion, at least having a bulk of your writing here profiled properly would give the readers a better idea of the actual lasting opinions/thoughts that you want to portray in your writing.


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