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'parents should be aware of the type of children's environment' - ILET



Islam 5 / 6  
Jun 12, 2012   #1
Research indicates that the characteristics we were born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any other experiences we may have in our life. Which do you consider to be the major influence?

Both the characteristics we were born with a long with the ones we acquire by our own experience affect our personalities and developments in a certain amount. Although we cannot specify how much each one affects our development, I believe that experience might be the most contributor in developing our personalities than the characteristics we were born with due to several factor that will be mentioned in the following paragraphs.

Researches indicate that the personality of any child is categorized in the first three years of his or her life. Thus, it is obvious that this conclusion encompasses children's experience that is included within these years. Children might not be aware of the type of environment they are living in during these three years but experience during this time period affect them unconsciously. During the second three years of children's life, environment affects their development hugely; it can make them stronger or weaker, dependents or independents, sociable or solitaries. Therefore, parents should be aware that children's development is personalized under the influence of their environment positively or negatively.

However, the characteristics we born with have a major influence on a child personality; it can act in the same direction as experience affect a child personality or it can act against a child experience. For example, imagine a child who was born with characteristics of stubborn and dour and this particular child have lived in a poor condition during his first six years where he had to struggle to stay a life. There is a strong conclusion that the child's guanine characteristics had an impact on his personality of being stubborn to stay a life.

Whether the environment or the guanine characteristics that have the huge impact on children developments, parents should be aware of the type of environment that their children are living in their first six years. Because as long as we can do nothing about the characteristics we were born with, we surly have the power to control the environment that surround our children.

vickey 9 / 18  
Jun 12, 2012   #2
Dear Islam

Nice topic.

I think the twins story will be apt to this story.
Sometimes, even twins have different personality and characteristic.
Also, I put a minor grammar collection as below.

I believe that experience might be the most contributor more contribute to develop our personalities than the characteristics we were born with due to several factor that will be mentioned in the following paragraphs.

Good luck for your test!
Saidakhror 6 / 21  
Jun 13, 2012   #3
A bit out of topic, regarding your second body. The question asks not about the time experience influences personality, but the extent it does so. Second body has insufficient support for what you are going to say. No need to say in which way-negative or positive acts personality, just add more information which will consolidate your point . Why do you need extra-information about parents in conclusion? Again, the essay goes out of topic. Amend these components))
OP Islam 5 / 6  
Jun 13, 2012   #4
Thank you all very much.

I will consider your point and thank you again for your notes :)

Regards,

Islam
dumi 1 / 6793  
Jun 13, 2012   #5
Both the characteristics we were born with a long withand the ones we acquire by our own experiences affect our personalities and self developments in a certain amount.ways.

Although we cannot specifyspecifically determine how much each one affects our development, I believe that experience might be the most important contributor in developing our personalities than the characteristics we were born with due to several factors that will be mentioneddiscussed in the following paragraphs.

Researches indicate that the personality of any child is categorized in the first three years of his or her life.

A bit out of topic, regarding your second body. The question asks not about the time experience influences personality, but the extent it does so. Second body has insufficient support for what you are going to say.

I agree with Saidakhror.... This para tends to confuse the reader who is looking for your reasons why you think one's experience have a greater bearing on personlity than born talents. Not only this para doesn't provide the reader with a clear reason but also it does'nt offer him specific examples or evidence to be convinced that you hold a valid view.
ah_zafari [Contributor] 40 / 661  
Jun 13, 2012   #6
most of the corrections have been done by others, but I would like to add just some suggestions.

Whether the environment or the guanine characteristics that have the huge impact on children developments(Use a synonym for this word because u used this before. I also think that u should mention which kind of developments. Is that the "cognitive development"? I think if u add the word "cognitive", the sentence would be more clear). , parents should be aware of the type of environmentatmosphere (this word is better in this context) that their children are living in their first six years. Because as long as we can do nothing about the characteristics we were born with, we surly have the power to control the environment that surround our children.
OP Islam 5 / 6  
Jun 13, 2012   #7
Thank you all very much, I will take all your note in writing another essay better

Thanks very much

Islam


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