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IELTS: all parents should take children training courses



Callie0202 5 / 14  
Jan 28, 2013   #1
Caring for children is probably the most important thing of the society. It is suggested that all mother and father should be required to take the children training courses. To what extent do you agree and disagree with the statement?

Children are the future and hope of the society. So it is very important to take care of them as well as possible. Some people suggested that all the mother and father should take the children training courses to enhance their abilities on the issue. I however cannot fulfill it completely.

At the beginning, it has to be admitted that children training courses are helpful to some extent to nursing children. Firstly, parents could be more confident since they have been taught how to deal with what will happen. Secondly, they will be more skilled and prepared on the issue. As a result, breeding up children will not become some challenges or difficulties for them.

On the other hand, children training courses probably have negative effects on the society. As many other school, this kind of courses supplies merely the general knowledge of nursing children. Consequently, parents who over rely on the courses will fail to give particular care to the children, since each of them possesses different personality and demands. What is more, it is hard for working-parents to take the courses, while the intermittent access may cause misunderstanding which perhaps leads to harm. Further more, the grandparents are rich in the experience of feeding children, the parents could learn from them regardless of the time and money.

In short, children training courses contribute to nursing children in terms of parents' confidence and skills. However, we cannot require that all the parents take them. There are other resources for parents to study the knowledge of caring children, such as the grandparents.

dumi 1 / 6793  
Jan 28, 2013   #2
Children are the future and hope of the society.

Great beginning :)

So it is very important to take care of them as well as possible.

... what do you mean by "as well as possible"? It sounds confusing :(

Some people suggested suggest that all the mother and father should take the children training courses to enhance their abilities on the issue.

.... This this a current argument and therefore you should keep it in present tense.

Firstly, parents could be more confident since they have been taught how to deal with what will happen

.... you need to have a link with the previous sentence;
These courses enhance the confidence level of parents as to how they should deal with particular situations in child rearing.
"child rearing" is a good key word for this topic which describes the process of promoting and supporting the physical, emotional, social, and intellectual development of a child from infancy to adulthood.
OP Callie0202 5 / 14  
Jan 28, 2013   #3
what do you mean by "as well as possible"? It sounds confusing :(

I meaned "well", and I wanted to emphasize it through "as ...as possible".

These courses enhance the confidence level of parents as to how they should deal with particular situations in child rearing.

Much better than mine, thank you.

child rearing

Great! thank you
wroeykid09 2 / 8  
Jan 28, 2013   #4
i really enjoyed this.
somysojan 8 / 14  
Jan 28, 2013   #5
i think it would be better if you agreed to the question to list out your ideas perfectlty.. but instead you put some opinions which are quiet weak in order to prove your argument.. any way..you tried well..best wishes.


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