Both parents work, bad or good??

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In today's competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents to go out to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parents' absence. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, it is very common that both parents in a family go to work. This trend is not restricted in families with difficult economic situations but also in wealthier ones. Some people believe that their children will have more benefits as both parents work, while others claim that this has negative effects on children. My opinion is that both parents working are an inevitable trend, it has its own advantages as well as disadvantages and that parents must find a means to keep balance between it pros and cons

It is undoubted that both parents working bring with it a lot of benefits not only to their children but also the whole family in general. First, with extra salary from both parents, children can be sent to a better school which requires more school fee, they can be given a better health care service from more expensive but better hospitals, in case they need closer supports with their studying their parents can afford to hire tutors without any difficulties, etc. Secondly, when a mother works, it means that she is helping to ease off her husband's financial burden and stress. A stable source of finance is always a foundation of every family's happiness. One obvious example is that traveling for a whole family annually, an excellent way of making families more close-knit, is only feasible if the financial source of that family is strong and steady.

On the other hand, this trend, however, has significant drawbacks. To begin with, in a family where both parents are too busy and concentrate too much on making money, their children are often lacked of necessary supports and supervision. For example, without parent's supports it is very likely for children to find their studying tedious and difficult. Overtime, it will make them demoralized, and affect seriously to their education's performance. Without parent's supervision, children will also be very likely to take on bad habits due to peer pressure such as game addicted, smoking, or even taking drugs. Moreover, there is an alarming issue that less and less close conversation have been made between children and the other family's members, many children feel lonely even in their own home. A parent should be aware that, not only the children's materialistic live need to be taken care of, but also their metal one.

In conclusion, I firmly believe that we cannot change the fact that both parents have to work nowadays. However, parents must find a happy medium to keep balance between their work life and the family life so that their children will be given benefits in both material and mental lives

good point.
resticted to families


------- Nice way of telling your opinion. I like it :)

My opinion is that both parents working areis an inevitable trend, ------- it refers to working and not to both parents


I prefer this way -" parents must find ways to keep a good balance between family and work life"


-------- this sentence is really too long and hence disturbs it's flow.... Also be careful with providing too many examples (I have noticed you have this temptation :D) In fact in this sentence you can easily avoid the tution part 'cause you have already talked about schooling. You can save time by providing one solid example for each reason. Many examples are unlikely to help you score more marks, but may cause you to run out of time. So be careful.

extra salary - extra income
school fee - school fees


you are repeating the same idea again. But you have presented this part nicely. Have a look at my suggestion in which I combine both;

It is undoubted that having both parents employed would reward their families and children in monetary terms. A stable source of finance is always a foundation of a harmonious and happy family. In this respect, a working wife contributes a lot to the wellbeing of her family by sharing the financial burdens with her husband shoulder to shoulder. Such families enjoy better options in life than the families that struggle with single income earners. For example, my parents, who were both working, could easily afford to educate me in one of the best schools in my country. But my father's collegue in office, who was in the same earning capacity as my father, decided to educate his son in a government school, which provided free education but had limited resources and fascilities for the students, although his preference was to educate his son at my school. This was due his inablity to afford being the single bread winner at home.

In this type of exams, if you can quickly come up with a very specific case to go with your reason, it saves your time and earns you marks

:)

Thank you Dumi :)

My opinion is that both parents working are is an inevitable trend, it has its own advantages as well as disadvantages and that parents must find a means (I think you should delete a with prular as well as i found Ways is more soundable here?) to keep balance between it pros and cons

Sorry about my mistake of "plural " word spelling
I meant you should delete "a" with plural

This is good, but have an extension to say why :)
In conclusion, I firmly believe that we cannot change the fact that both parents have to work nowadays to meet modern challenges of
families.


happy mode


keep a balance


say this differently;

children would be benefited in their emotional, psychological and personality development.

Nowadays, it is very common that both parents in a family go out to work.

Some people believe that their children will have more benefits as both parents work

My opinion is that both parents working in abroad are an...

you should pay attention to the topic sentences. in the topic you were asked about parents who go out to work not who go to work