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In the past, buildings often reflected the culture of a society- IELTS



kurianjoseph1 8 / 18  
Feb 13, 2013   #1
In the past, buildings often reflected the culture of a society but today all modern buildings look alike and cities throughout the world are becoming more and more similar.

What do you think is the reason for this, and is it a good thing or a bad thing?


There are instances in the past where buildings often reflect the culture of a society. However, in the modern world, these architectural structures look alike and is hard to distinguish cities from different part of the world. It is felt that trend is a good things. Looking at scarce resources and will be analysed for viability.

For one, it is a fact that in the globalised world, land has become more expensive and a valuable resource than previous decades. Take Sydney, for example. There has been a huge increase in the construction of tall buildings in nuke and corner of the city for the past few years. This uprise clearly shows that land is a valuable resource and should be utilised wisely. Therefore, it has become hard to recognise cities like Sydney, Berlin etc. where land is scarce and valuable resource.

Although, changes are inevitable and one cannot stand in the way of technological advancement in the modern world ,cities should keep some individuality and cultural heritage. For instance, in Paris , it is prohibited to construct tall in the heart of the city as this will spoil the skyline view. This rule clearly not only prevents constructing tall buildings in the city, but also encourage architectures to design unique structures .This points out that cities can take steps to reflect their cultural values by designing that is unique from buildings in other cities.

In brief, it is regrettable that cities are alike, one could take measures to design unique structures that help to maintain its cultural values. It is hoped that, more buildings will be designed in a unique way that it recognisable from buildings in other cities.

dumi 1 / 6793  
Feb 13, 2013   #2
It is felt that trend is a good things thing

... small typo :)

Looking at scarce resources and will be analysed for viability.

... This sentence is incomplete and abrupt. You don't have an issue with a word count and can have as much as words in your essay :D

So don't write too short sentences that disturb your flow.... Up to this sentence your introduction flowed nicely :)

land has become more expensive and a valuable resource than in previous decades.

cities should keep some individuality and cultural heritage.

cities should maintain their identity and cultural heritage at least to a certain degree.
carito15 4 / 5  
Feb 13, 2013   #4
I think your essay is good. The structure is OK! As regards the ideas I think they are clearly expressed
joythblessy 86 / 266  
Feb 14, 2013   #5
Ha i Kurian...

The prompt asked about the reasons of alike buildings in the cities around the world. And it is good or bad...):
I feel the 2nd body para is offtopic....(:
you should explain the trend is positive or negative..

Reasons..
:need of more place for living and other activities..
:overpopulation cities..
:costy land price in cities (you mentioned)
:need of using every inch of space.

Tessy


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