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Most of the people do not have adequate knowledge of the place they are traveling to



legend777 5 / 14  
Oct 17, 2013   #1
Traveling is one the fascinating ways of enjoying life, that one can done this either in a group led by a tour guide or by himself. Both ways have their own pros and cons, in my point of view traveling in a group with tour guide is one of the good way to travel but it is not the best way in all situation. I will clarify my point first by providing some reasons and examples below.

First of all, I want to bring reasons that some people believe that the best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guid. I think most of the people do not have adequate knowledge of the place they are traveling to. For instance they do not know about the culture, history and the language of the local people of the region they are traveling to and a tour guide can teach them valuable information about the place and people. Furthermore, a group that leaded by a good tour guide would have a good schedule for viewing the beautiful scenes and historical sites and buildings so individuals in group should be adapted to the plan of tour leader, so this group is an organized and efficient one.

So far so good, traveling in a group led by a tour guide have it's own disadvantages. Consider a case that some people want to see places that are not so famous and tour guide just want to show the group the famous ones, so they should obey the tour leader and this brings them dissatisfaction. Besides, for individual that already have enough information about the place it is frustrating to listen to the explanation of the tour leader.

Although some people believe that best way to travel is in group with a tour guide, I prefer to travel by my own because whenever I decide to go to travel first I search for enough knowledge about the place until I got enough information, then I go to the place I want.

Pahan 1 / 1824  
Oct 20, 2013   #2
First of all, I want to bring reasons that some people believe that the best way to travel is in a group led by a tourguidguide .

.... You should start with the reason because your body paragraphs should explain reasons for justifying your position. Don't drag it and come quickly to your reasoning;

First, travelers generally lack sufficient knowledge about the places they intend to travel. Therefore, travelling in a group led by a tour guide is very helpful for them to get the best experience and gain knowledge in a foreign country.
dumi 1 / 6795  
Oct 20, 2013   #3
Traveling is one the fascinating ways of enjoying life

.... you are so correct :)

that one can done this either in a group led by a tour guide or by himself.

.... Take this idea to another sentence. Also, there are grammar issues here.
This is my suggestion;
There are two ways that one can do this; travel by self or travel in a group led by a tour guide.

traveling in a group with tour guide is one of the good ways


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