nature and nurture
This is a writting task 2 in ielts exam :
It's generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for music and sport, and others are not. However, it's sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become good sports person or musician.
Discuss the two ideas giving your opinion. ==> i am m ielts practice beginer. this is my first essay, please help me to improve my writting skill. Thanks in advance.
Nature and nurture - two normal issues in our life. Some people were born with their special talent. However, some rest is not and they must be trained to become profession. My two cents, Practice is a key which is not only turning a natural talent become more profession, but also making impossible into possible.
First and foremost, some children has their own talents because of genetic origin, which make them excel than others. For instance, a boy has flexible legs which help him run faster than his friends. However, if he is deprived of practise, his talent will become nothing special.
On the other hand, a child who was born with no talents and he/she want to have some special things to make himself/herself become out standing. The only way they can do is that find things they love and practise every day. That way will boot them to high profession and excel.
On the whole, when we do something with endeavour, we will have good results. Nothing is impossible if we do our best with massive effort.
Boost not boot
I think people were born with their own special talents is sound better
You mean higher professional level?
some rest is not -> the rest were not
must should be trained
profession -> a professional.
My two cents, -> From my own point of view,
is not only turning -> not only turns
profession-> professional/ skillful
making impossible into possible -> make anything possible to achieve
has -> have
genetic origin -> their family background/ origin/ genetics
excel than -> surpass others
help -> helps
practise -> practice
out standing -> outstanding
Tuong, you have not written the appropriate amount of words for this essay to be a completely developed and accurate Task 2 presentation for an IELTS test. The minimum number of words that you should be writing for this type of essay is 250 words. You wrote a total of 180 words only. This lack of word requirement will result in a failing score for this essay.
The reason the essay will fail is because you have not appropriately explained all of the reasoning in the paragraphs you presented. Your opening statement is not a correct paraphrase of the original prompt, your 3 body paragraphs are not properly developed and lack the 3-5 sentence requirement per paragraph, and your concluding statement is not an appropriate concluding summary for the task either. These are the main scoring considerations that led to a failing score for the essay along with the minimum word requirement.
For your reference, it would be best if you review the work of the other students here in order to familiarize yourself with the task 2 essay writing methods, discussion styles, and other requirements. I guarantee that you will improve tremendously after you read, remember, and practice writing your next practice essay based upon previous advice given to other students.
Don't get me wrong though. I see a tremendous amount of potential in your writing that could lead to your becoming a passing exam taker. You just need to further develop your writing and reasoning skills in order to achieve that. Those are skills I can help you improve over time.