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It is general believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport, music, and other are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sport person or musician.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion?
Nowadays, some may hold the opinion that a few people are born with certain talents, for example for sport or music, and others are not. However, others have opposite attitude; they believe that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. To be frank, I agree with the latter idea. I will discuss both these views and show my arguments in this essay.
Obviously, the first belief is true in some ways. I have ever watched a TV show that told about a musical genius; it is unbelievable, the genius is only 3 years-old. The programmer turned on a classical music and the child played a role of a kapellmeister. It was strange because he acted as if he was controlling a real orchestra. All of his hands' movements were congruous with the melody of the music. No one taught him but he still could do this; and it is said that his great musical ability is god- given. Meanwhile, when they played the music for another three year-old child; he also listened but he did not feel the music as the first child and so that he did not have any expression.
Actually, there are many people who are born without any gifts, however, they are carefully trained and that's why they still become good musicians or famous sport players. Normally, children who were born in artist- traditional family have musical talent; however, there are many famous singers who grow up in families that their parents are both workers. These people are successful and become popular simply due to their efforts and will. Vietnamese often say: "There is a will, there is a way"; if you have interests, you are assiduous and you are taught cautiously, you can become a talented person.
In general, there is no road filled with roses. Although you are born- gifted; if you do not try your best, your talents is disappear little by little. That's the reason why I agree that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.
This topic cries out for a response that follows a thesis, antithesis, synthesis structure, and in fact your essay comes fairly close to having just that. I'd refine the essay to make that structure more explicit, though. So, start out by saying that both natural talent and hard work are important elements for success in any given field.