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ielts "When people break the traditions of their predecessors they advance more"



lorena 1 / -  
Jun 15, 2010   #1
Society advances most when people break from the traditions of their predecessors. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Historically known facts provide information to people that modern society was developed due to not only interactions between nations, but also broken past traditions. Making the next step of development meets a need to put aside traditional culture and experience. Crossinteracting promotes society to advance morally and politically. Traditionally supported society , as usual, is a way of staying the same , missing a chance to change dramatically.

To begin with, the past society was established by little closed groups of people/ speaking lots of languages and experiancing different culture behaviours were obstacles to get alog. Occupying new lands and fading traditions of residents , conquerors proposed new culture while features of the past one tried to survive. The prominent examples are languages that have improved and make possible uniting people of different nations in one multinational society such as the US, the UK, and so on. Traditions are related to the past and based on our belief and relationship. It is obvious that any outsider can change society in an efficient way. Staying traditional , humanity has not been allowed to futher and has lived in caves instead of comfortable houses. Phylosophy rules state that any development needs to add new progressive features and qualities whereas to minus old unuseful.

On the other hand, traditional culture is a way to express individuality. All nations, even only few people are alive, have own impressive dances, songs, clothing, preferences in architectual designes that are of great importance not to be a part of a crowd and represent themselves as a colourful attractive personality. Majority of cultural festivals help nations help nations to enhance relations and not to forget family roots to create national heritage.

To sum up, breaking traditions of precessors is essential for developing and improving society. I am really sure that traditions could overcome back to the past moral and political considerations. Contributing new knowledge and inaccepting past needless experience, society gets advantages and moves forward paralelly to technological progress.

Larysa Rozmetanyuk

PeaceEarth 2 / 3  
Jun 16, 2010   #2
Historically known facts provide information to people that modern society was developed due to not only interactions between nations, but also broken past traditions.

I would reword this to flow better and say something like:

Backed by Historical facts, it has been known that modern society was developed not only by interactions between nations but also by broken traditions. (traditions already imply the past)
EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Jun 16, 2010   #3
Making Taking the next step of development creates a need to put aside traditional culture and experience. Cross-cultural interaction promotes society's advancement morally and politically. ...

Use a spell checker:
Staying traditional , humanity has not been allowed to further its sophistication and has lived in caves instead of comfortable houses. Philosophers state that any development needs to add new progressive features and qualities while eliminating the old and useless features.

All nations, even only few people are alive nations where only a small number of people live, have their own impressive ...

To sum up, breaking traditions of predecessors is essential...

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