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IELTS-More and more people want to buy famous brands of clothes, cars and other items.


tiyuok 4 / 16  
Dec 12, 2013   #1
It's my task 2 in the IELTS test, I got 5.5 finally. I wonder why my score is so low. Anybody help me to check it and give my some comments? very appreciated!

More and more people want to buy famous brands of clothes, cars and other items. What are the reasons? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

In modern societies, it is true that many people are tending to buy some famous brands such as clothes and cars. Whenever you talk to them about this item, they are likely to tell you which brand is popular because they are so familiar with.

What are the reasons of this phenomenon? As far as I concern, there are two main reasons. Firstly, people are exposed to millions of advertisements, and each commodity is always showed with a slogan: we are famous brand. Most people, especially the youngster, are more likely to buy what they told to be famous and cool. Moreover, many people are likely to compare with their peers with famous commodities. They are tending to buy what is popular and show off by this way.

The phenomenon will definitely produce bad influence. If people buy everything on the advertisement, they will be more likely to buy the fake, instead of a good quality and what they really need. Moreover, if people always show off by famous brand of commodities, they will be depressed one day, because if they find that they fall behind with others, they will emerge a mental-imbalanced in mind, what finally do harm for their personality.

My view is that people should buy something based on what they need, and happiness of people should come from their families and friends, instead of showing of by famous brand.
MisterWandering 18 / 321 130  
Dec 13, 2013   #2
some famous brands such asof clothes and cars

Whenever you talk to them about this item, they are likely to tell you which brand is popular because they are so familiar with.

This sentence adds no value to your introduction. Instead, you should try to answer the questions given in the prompt. Also, avoid using "you" in your essay.

What are the reasons of this phenomenon?

This sentence should be omitted.

we are famous brand.

You should give an example instead.

what they told

what they think/what they are told

produce bad influence

have negative effects
Your ideas need developing with explanations and examples.
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Dec 13, 2013   #3
What are the reasons offor this phenomenon?

Firstly, people are exposed to millions of advertisements, and each commodity is always showed with a slogan:

First, companies spend lavishly to advertise their brands and these advertisements make a great impact on developing a brand loyalty towards their products in consumers' minds.

Moreover, many people are likely to compare with their peers with famous commodities.

Secondly, people, especially the younger crowd, tend to follow the trend and just follow what their peers do.

. If people buy everything on the advertisement, they will be more likely to buy the fake, instead of a good quality and what they really need.

If people buy everything that is advertised, then their buying decisions do not reflect any prudent buying. They may be believing everything said in the advertisements as true, but in the real world it is not so.
gavin 2 / 4  
Dec 13, 2013   #4
1.There is no reference about positive or negative or no explanations you need two reasons to support if it is a positive or negative one。

2.You may have got ( 5,6,6,6= 5.5) ; task response seems to be 5 as you do not have two reasons to support whether it is positive or negative.
FrankZheng 3 / 14 7  
Dec 19, 2013   #5
Why would you link famous brand products to fake items, instead more people would feel comfortable with the idea that these products are high quality.

And why would they have metal imbalance? Maybe it's true for some for them ,and you can make a relevant example to convince the examiner.


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