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[IELTS TASK 2] Some people claim that not enough of the waste from home is recycled...


snackara 3 / 4 1  
Mar 21, 2024   #1
Topic: Some people claim that not enough of the waste from home is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste?

Whether governments should legislate for recycling is an issue of broad interest. While there are still disparate arguments, I personally concur with the need for regulation due to some reasons.

First and foremost, the detrimental impacts rising from free-of-law recycling are undeniable. Without restriction of laws, violation continues escalating, thus sparking serious repercussions. As unrecycled waste will be mainly brought to landfill, pollution will expand at an alarming rate, posing great environmental threats to different agencies working on the environment such as waste processing companies, tourism, economy, etc. Handling these problems would cause significant loss to the national budget, since governments have to allocate financial assistance to various related departments.

Furthermore, legislating for recycling ensures wider compliance in the community. Stringent penalties accompanied with laws such as forfeit, arrestment, imprisonment, etc. would stimulate people's rigorous adherence to the regulations as well as urge companies to address environmental problems. For example, a dairy company in Vietnam called Vinamilk has introduced bio-degradable bags and hydro flask metal bottles to consumers for recycling purposes. Their inventions under the influence of social media have resulted in great amount of consumption and support from customers, especially the adolescents, therefore not only contributing to the economy but also disseminating environmental messages. These productive approaches together with strong consciousness of people would enable further sustainable development targets in our community.

In brief, bringing in recycling laws is necessary to raise people's awareness and conformity. Governments had better come up with appropriate legislation in order to gain as much benefits as possible. (254)

Thanks for your feedbacks!
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 14,801 4780  
Mar 28, 2024   #2
The prompt restatement is incomplete as it does not refer to the basis of the debate regarding legislating recycling from homes. That is the anchor statement of the original paragraph so it should not be missing from the rewritten reference. The writer's opinion does not follow the expected response format. It is not in the form of a measured response. Therefore, the prompt restatement + writer's opinion paragraph will not receive full scoring credentials in its preliminary form. Too many requirements were overlooked in the paraphrasing.

The reasoning paragraphs are acceptable. These explain the basis of the law consideration and also, how the law might be implemented to give it a chance to take effect. The problem is the summary overview. It is 2 sentences long but it does not provide a reverse summary of the discussion points and, it is not 40 words long either. So that will affect the final scoring consideration as well.


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