IELTS Task 2 - More people are complaining about obesity, particularly the consumption of junk food.

These days, in many countries, more and more people are complaining about obesity, particularly the consumption of junk food.
What are the reasons for this, and how could the problem solved?

Nowadays, in many countries a number of people are appealing about corpulence especially, eating the junk food. However, in many parts of the world, this problem is increasing dramatically year by year. This essay will look at the reasons for this and propose some solution.

One of the main causes of the problem is that these days, people's lifestyles are changing. And many people are working long hours in this world. And they do not have time to find ingredients or healthy food. Then they may eat junk food a lot. If people eat a lot of junk food. People become obesity. In addition, nowadays, many woman do not cook any food at home. They usually buy from the restaurants. It is also one of the maine cause. The solution is the woman should prepare the food at home. And they should encourage people to eat any food at home.

Another problem is that many people do not have breakfast, lunch, or dinner at exact time. They usually eat food, when they have free time. As to the fact, if people eat something after the 6 p.m. it has harmful effect to the people's health. To tackle this issue, people must have a breakfast, lunch, or dinner at exact time. And they must not eat nothing after 6 p.m.

A third cause of the problem is that junk food, fast food are not very expensive as healthy food. Therefore many people prefer to eat this kind of food a lot. And they become fat. The solution is that the many cafes should decrease the price of healthy food.

In conclusion, these days, the big problem is that humanity do not eat correctly. And also this issue common in many countries. My view is that government and doctors are responsible to solve the problem.

Hi Mark, I would like to add a few notes on your essay.
First off all, it is a very interesting answer to the essay, it's almost like you are writing a research paper, you made sure that the facts you gathered are realistically happening in real life, not just an idea or an opinion.

Now, I like the idea that you were able to present the ideas in a manner that a reader can understand, moreover, can benefit from the ideas and opinion that is conveyed in your essay. It is indeed a living parasite to todays age, obesity is one disease that will not only affect the person who is infected but the people around them and will definitely drag the family down, so before it starts, the best choice to do is to practice preventive measures, discipline and most of all, watch the way their life is going.

Overall, your essay is well written, of course there are a few suggestions from other writers and I hope you follow though on that and make use of them in your revision as well as in your future writing references.

Keep writing.

hello :)
if you prepare for ielts essay , you could be carefull at each paragraph and you should keep separate different content ,for example, all of solution should be gather one and reasons as well.