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Some people could be famous if they try and train



soheilataheri 1 / -  
Jan 18, 2012   #1
Topic: It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or a musician.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
There is no denying the fact that innate talent could be one factor to achieve success. It is a popular topic about relative importance of certain talent and training, before rendering my opinion, I think it is important to take a glance at the arguments on both sides.

Today, in all over the world children have opportunity to training and develop their skills, hence if they try and hard work day by day, they would be a good sport player or instrument player or any field they like, it just depend on their motivation also there is no denying parents should provide for them suitable environments and encourage them.

It is real, there are some people could famous if they try and training, but that is not just piece of a cake for them. Take as an example: there is a well-known tennis player Rafael Nadal who is right hand person, but when he started to playing tennis, his uncle forced him to take racket with the left hand, it was not easy but after years and hard work he become successful and obtain many medals and cups.

However, there are some who claim that successful players have certain talent. This theory can be true but only an about singer who was bestowed by God beautiful voice can become amazing singer. Although, they have to learn how control their voice and breath.

Taking that point into consideration, I concur with this fact "success means ninety nine percent assiduity and one percent certain talent". Needless to say, every person who has will and motivation can achieve their dream.

mussy 5 / 17  
Jan 19, 2012   #2
The importance of hardwork, will to succeed and perseverance is being expressed in your essay.
What I discover about it is that your points are plain and you also have good sentence fluency. Good work there.
Thors Hammer 5 / 60  
Jan 20, 2012   #3
As true as tomorrow comes, we must acknowledge the assumption that certain people have natural inherencies that allow them to achieve success with less difficulty than others.

topic of relevant importance to particular...
, and before...
It is crucial to examine the importance of arguments from both perspectives.
In light of today, and all around the world...
hence, if thy place efforts into working all day
Motivations as well as
Provide to them safe and suitable environments while offering encouragement.
Meanwhile, everyone has a chance at stardom though means of applied effort and training...
Right handed,
Take the racket
ken99m 5 / 9  
Jan 20, 2012   #4
very nice explanation,but why did u hit on both sides? BTW its very nice, add more prominent examples if u can.


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