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IELTS Writing Task 2 - People should follow the local customs and traditions



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Sep 16, 2025   #1
People should follow the local customs and traditions, when they come to live in a new country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Ethical marginalization presents a pressing concern, particularly in multicultural regions. While some argue that migrants with similar background should stay in the same neighborhood, suggesting the formation of a closely-knitted community to preserve their original way of living, this passage aims to demonstrate why such a narrow approach is harmful to society.

To initiate, embracing local customs play a pivotal role in aiding newcomers to integrate into the unfamiliar environment. Engaging local rituals can help people grasp the local language and adapt to their work and academic lives through their interactions with native speakers. Research highlights the widespread agreement that expats actively participating in local events require less effort in securing employment opportunities.

Furthermore, practicing local traditions significantly contributes to fostering trust and social connections with the locals. For example, some behavior considered appropriate in Oriental cultures are perceived as rude in the Occidental realm. Studies have shown that constant exposure to local practices can mitigate socially awkward situations and expand one's social horizons within local communities.

While skeptics argue that an overemphasis on absorbing the local culture would overshadow an individual's original heritage, it is essential to recognize that the experience enables people to examine their cultural values from an alternate perspective. Historians contend that studying foreign history enlightens one with a holistic view of their ingrained original culture.

In summary, being receptive to the local culture not only allows migrants to improve their career prospects but also facilitates social interactions. By promoting inclusivity, we can cultivate an environment for people with diverse background to thrive in.

*Please kindly provide the estimated band score in your feedback. Thank you.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15921  
Sep 16, 2025   #2
Your opening statement is not only off the mark in terms of restating the original concept of the prompt, it is also a confusing word salad. It cannot be understood in terms of context because you decided to turn it into a vocabulary exercise of advanced English words and phrases that you do not actually know how to properly use. Therefore, your task accuracy score, as well as your writer's opinion presentation will receive a failing mark. That said, the essay has already failed in its actual scoring because of the severe errors made in the first paragraph, which represents a majority of your final score. You did not even come close to a proper writer's opinion presentation when one considers the question posed before you. The examiner may not even continue reading your essay till the end because of the impossibility of you gaining a passing score towards the end, when all factors have been considered. The TA score is what will prevent that.


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