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People with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments

jenny0601 2 / 2  
Nov 28, 2022   #1
Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor.

Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

These days, a wide range of people tend to cope with problems relating to health by simply using medicines and curing methods without the instructions of doctors. However, I believe the positive aspects of this trend are eclipsed by more immediate threats

On the one hand, there is numerous useful information in terms of various kinds of illnesses. Therefore, people can easily search and get to know about their health issues. It is extremely convenient, so individuals do not need to book appointments with doctors to learn about their little sicknesses. Moreover, some people may find it quite economical, to just buy medicines or receive appropriate treatments.

On the other hand, it is very risky to consume medicines that are not suitable for a person's health, which leads to a result that the immune system of the person can be decreased and vulnerable. In addition, medical information on the internet is not always accurate, then people can misunderstand their health problems, and will not get cured in the correct ways, as a result, their sickness may not only get worse but also more complicated to cure. When visiting doctors, patients will be consulted by professionals about their health situations, and they will be arranged on the right path to deal with their illness.

In conclusion, it may be acceptable to cure small diseases by one's self. Nevertheless, I fiercely recommend people should get medical advice from professional doctors.
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Nov 29, 2022   #2
Please make sure to double check the draft version of the essay prior to submission. That will help with the correcting of the presentation in terms of missing punctuation marks, improperly used punctuation, incorrect word choices, and sentence structure improvement. These are the main problems that can be found in this essay with a simple scan of the work. The analysis of the presentation has not even been completed at that point and already the essay is in a big risk of not receiving a failing score.

The question asked is if the trend is a negative or positive development. The question was not responded to in the correct format. Rather, the writer immediately jumped to his thesis statement. In his haste to establish his discussion point, he will lose points for not directly presenting his opinion in a manner related to the question provided.

Since the writer has a single opinion for this essay, the discussion paragraphs should have represented 2 valid reasons for his opinion. What the writer did was try to justify both sides of the discussion in his reasoning paragraphs. That is the wrong writing approach for reasons previously mentioned. The essay cannot receive complete scoring marks since the evidence presentation is incomplete and lacking in substance. This happened because the writer used a comparative discussion rather than the single opinion defense format, which is the expected response format for this essay.

While the writer understood the topic for discussion and pretty much knew how to defend his point of view, the response format that was used proved to be the main problem for the presentation. The lack of proper response formatting and approach led to heavy deductions in the C+C section. This essay may not receive a passing score in an actual setting.
Meriem slimani 1 / 3  
Dec 2, 2022   #3
I liked the content of your essay however the prompt was about your opinion and you, I could not deduce this from the beginning of the essay and I felt some contradiction reading the advantages then disadvantages, personally I would have my opinion at the beginning then elaborate

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